Which sentence is better?

Question

A. The nest of the yellow jackets loomed, an ugly lump larger than a man's head.

B. The nest of the yellow jackets, an ugly lump larger than a man's head, loomed.

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Answer 1

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The first one is better as the verb relates more closely to the subject. 

Neither is incorrect but neither is brilliant. Omit 'the' before yellow.

Answer 2

A - the picture created itself in my 🧠, I didnt have to do it myself like the B rubbish.

Answer 3

We encountered an ominous yellow jacket hive bigger than a man's head.