der asked in Society & CultureLanguages · 1 month ago

Could you please tell me how good the writing mehanics of this text are? Could you leave an explanation for each correction? ?

Once you get there, you will be able to rent a kayak and experience the force of the unrelenting waters under your boat. Time is passing quickly? Don't worry, you will surely find something amazing to do in the afternoon. Take a break and enjoy the local food. Even in this case, you will notice that everything is low-cost and nontheless, it would make happy everyone.

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I'm learning English.

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    Once you get there, you will be able to rent a kayak and experience the force of the unrelenting waters under your boat.

    **unrelenting force may be a bit too intense. You could say

    - exciting current under your boat

    - rushing waters under your boat

     Time is passing quickly?

    **This doesn't really fit with the rest of the theme. You could say:

    - Are you looking for more activities?

    - Still have a need for adventure?

     Don't worry, you will surely find something amazing to do in the afternoon. 

    Take a break and enjoy the local food.

    **food sounds kind of plain. Make it more exciting by saying cuisine.

     Even in this case,

    **Sounds kind of clunky and doesn't fit the theme. You could say:

    - And we would like to remind you

     you will notice that everything is low-cost and nontheless, it would make happy everyone.

    **This one is really broken. You could say:

    - that everything here is low-cost and that we aim to make sure everyone leaves happy. 

    Once you get there, you will be able to rent a kayak and experience the exciting current under your boat. Still have a need for adventure? Don't worry, you will surely find something amazing to do in the afternoon. Take a break and enjoy the local cuisine. And we would like to remind you that everything here is low-cost and that we aim to make sure everyone leaves happy.

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