San
Lv 5

Which sentence is correct?

A. On that morning when everything seemed perfect, they had no idea what awaited them.

B. On that morning everything seemed perfect, they had no idea what awaited them.

Can the "when" after "that morning" be omitted? Thanks!

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  • 2 months ago
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    yes, you can remove the "when", but you have to replace it with a comma. It also would likely be necessary to add "and" before "they had no idea". 

    Why?  The primary statement is "they had no idea".  The part "on that morning" is a predicate phrase, a phrase in the normal structure of a sentence which would be placed at the end.  This is why there is a comma before "they had no idea". (they had no idea. when? on that morning.  what about that morning? that morning when everything seemed perfect).

    When you employ "when", it directly links "everything seemed perfect" to "on that morning", declaring "everything seemed perfect" as part of the predicate phrase (a set of words that would be placed at the end of the sentence in a normal structure).  However, if you remove "when", you also remove that link, and the phrase "everything seemed perfect" becomes an independent clause.  Everything seemed perfect.  They had no idea.  That would normally be two sentences.  Thus, it would be best to employ "and" to indicate that you are combining two clauses into one sentence.

    The dog ate a cat.  The cat ate a fish.  The dog ate a cat, and the cat ate a fish.

    In effect, when you remove "when", you create two sentences which share a common predicate phrase "on that morning".  "On that morning, the sky was clear and the temperature was high." (a compound sentence)  Compare to "On that morning when the sky was clear, the temperature was high" (a complex sentence with an inversion of predicate phrase location) or, " the sky was clear on that morning, and the temperature was (also) high that morning."

  • Zapata
    Lv 6
    2 months ago

    "A" is the correct sentence. 

    "B" might make sense when spoken, because you could add a dramatic pause before the second part, but when it is written it can only be correct if you added "but" before "they had no idea.."

  • jehen
    Lv 7
    2 months ago

    Both are fine, but I like 'B' better.  

  • 2 months ago

    the first sentence better conveys the meaning, imho

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  • 2 months ago

    A works best. Yes you can omit 'when', but I think I would use a semi-colon to replace the comma in that second sentence. 

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