Does this sentence make sense? Is it grammatically correct?
Patricia shrieked as she was driven backwards by a sudden blow of Jonathan's fist.
- Elaine MLv 71 month ago
Physically you don't have time to shriek when hit like that.
And it's redundant, all blows are sudden.
- bluebellbkkLv 71 month ago
It's grammatically correct, and it 'makes sense' as we can all understand it, but it's rather clumsy.
- 1 month ago
its, clumsy. I like:
Suddenly Jonathan attacked and Patricia shrieked as she was driven backwards
- pianomanLv 71 month ago
Yes, it appears to be grammatically correct and it does make sense.
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- GA41Lv 71 month ago
I believe it is grammatically correct and it makes sense. In your sentence, "as she was driven backwards by a sudden blow of Jonathan's fist", is a prepositional phrase used as an adverb which modifies shrieked.
- Pearl LLv 71 month ago
it makes sense to me
- Sir CausticLv 61 month ago
I'm afraid it isn't, Perspiring. Try "Shrieking, driving backward by a blowing of the fist of the dreaded John, she flew back and shrieked yet again because it was painful". Please don't thank me.
- David SLv 71 month ago
Patricia shrieked as she was driven backward by a sudden blow from Jonathan's fist.
Patricia shrieked as she was driven backward by the sudden blow of Jonathan's fist.
Note: Backward is standard in American English and backwards is standard in British English.
- SpeedLv 71 month ago
It's ungainly and I'd rewrite it, but other than the correction "from Jonathan's fist," it's got no mistakes.
I think the correction I'd make first is changing the passive voice of the part starting with "as she was driven" to active voice, then see how it reads.
- yet-knish!Lv 71 month ago
a sudden blow from Jonathan's fist