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How do I rewrite this so it sounds poetic?

Desiring and craving you takes just a poor excuse.

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  • 1 month ago
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    I think the sentence stands fine on its own.  However, you could substitute craving with yearning or longing perhaps.

    As an alternate suggestion: Desiring and yearning for you needs only the poorest of excuses.

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  • Linda
    Lv 7
    1 month ago

    To spend an hour in your presence 

    Makes my heart yearn with desire.

    I never want to be very far away 

    From the way you make me feel each day.

    Source(s): Corny but true
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