What do you think of this poem?

Do not lie to me, my love

Dresses are for little girls

And old clergy men.

You belong in blue pants.

That gold is in your eyes,

That secret kind of brown.

I will unlock your mouth

And kiss you as you fall.

You can’t help yourself.

Love is but a flying word.

Curses hold greater power.

Until death do we now part.

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  • Lili
    Lv 7
    4 weeks ago

    You have some potential, but you need to learn the mechanics of poetry and to avoid clichés.

    I strongly suggest that you take some classes. I think you may have a future, but your talent and instincts need to be schooled and honed.

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