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I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good as I'm not a native speaker. Should I change these lines to make it sound more natural? On 1 May 1820, the police broke the door of the convent and took the Benedictines by force to Warsaw. On 9 June, the governor general ordered the demolition of... show more I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good as I'm not a native speaker. Should I change these lines to make it sound more natural?

On 1 May 1820, the police broke the door of the convent and took the Benedictines by force to Warsaw.
On 9 June, the governor general ordered the demolition of the church and its buildings.
The people revolted ]rose to action?]. They organised into armed groups and came to defend the church.
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