Fluent English speakers, could you help me with my English?

I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good as I'm not a native speaker. Should I change these lines to make it sound more natural? I would be grateful for any answers. He started his career as a forklifter and quickly began working his way up the career ladder. As his leadership skills... show more I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good as I'm not a native speaker. Should I change these lines to make it sound more natural? I would be grateful for any answers.

He started his career as a forklifter and quickly began working his way up the career ladder. As his leadership skills became evident, there soon came a moment when Tom took the steering wheel to manage an entire project.
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