Can you give me feedback on this book I'm writing?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-9DV41MIrZA28WJ_BTSR5RxcAXr-6pyfCFmE4WTdVZs/edit?usp=sharing

It's a story about a guy who is trying to save the natural world from merging from the ethereal plane.
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