Please improve this sentence?
I rub my eyes, as my vision becomes clear, and I see a giant yellow eye, behind the iron bars, watching me intently.
- Lord BaconLv 79 months agoFavorite Answer
I rub my eyes and, as my vision becomes clear, I see a giant yellow eye watching me intently from behind the iron bars.
- MarliLv 79 months ago
If you are so keen on writing in present tense: I rub my eyes. As my vision clears, I see a giant yellow eye watching me intently behind the iron bars.
- Elaine MLv 79 months ago
It's actual two sentences. NOT one sentence.
I rubbed my eyes, clearing my vision. There was a giant yellow eye behind the iron bars, watching me intently.
- 9 months ago
I would say “As I rub my eyes, my vision becomes clearer, and I see