Fluent speakers of English, please, can you help me with my English?

I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good. Should I change this paragraph to make it sound more natural? I would appreciate any answers. I do not think people need to have a life partner while they are still young. They have not discovered themselves and have not filled their life with goals... show more I need to translate a paragraph but my English is not very good. Should I change this paragraph to make it sound more natural? I would appreciate any answers.

I do not think people need to have a life partner while they are still young. They have not discovered themselves and have not filled their life with goals and meaning. Nowadays young men feel a pressure to lose their virginity. And people snub on girls who do not see a family as their life goal. I personally support people who have the courage to walk their own path without listening what others say.
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