Is this a decent conclusion sentence?
"That said, the use of these graphics in the novel cause a greater impact to be left on the reader, as he or she will be left with a lasting impression of the emotions the characters have gone through throughout the course of the story."
For context, this is about the impact the graphics have on the story being told in Marjane Satrapi's "Persepolis".
- Land-sharkLv 77 months ago
"That said, the use of these graphics in the novel causes a greater impact to be left upon the reader, as he or she will almost certainly be left with an even sharper impression of the emotions which the characters have experienced throughout the course of the story."
- Anonymous7 months ago
No It's bloody awful. Your wording is very clumsy; doesn't flow smoothly and requires more words than needed.
Drop - ''That said...'' and simplify the rest to say something like to ''The use of these graphics in the novel have a greater impact on the reader by leaving a more lasting impression of the emotions the characters have experienced.
- bluebellbkkLv 77 months ago
Mind your syntax. The USE ... CAUSES ...
But just out of curiosity, why would the graphic themselves give the reader a more lasting impression of the characters' emotions than a non-graphic novel would do?