Native English speakers, could you please help me with these issues?
Is this sentence correct:
"I like to read books with good storilines, which elicit emotions in me, and if possible, that teach me something, whether in knowledge or even just in wisdom."
- SpeedLv 77 months agoFavorite Answer
I like to read books with good storilines [storylines, spelling, but the word “plots” works better], which [change to “that”] elicit emotions in me [delete “in me,” since it’s understood], and if possible [delete "if possible"], that [delete “that”] teach me something, whether in knowledge or even just in wisdom [final phrase is awkward. Consider “whether specific knowledge or general wisdom” or something similar].
If you were to accept all the recommendations, it would read
I like to read books with good plots that elicit emotions and teach me something, whether specific knowledge or general wisdom.
- John PLv 77 months ago
"...storylines (note spelling) which give rise to emotions, and which, if possible, teach me something, either specific knowledge or simply wisdom." Note position of "if possible".
- bluebellbkkLv 77 months ago
I like to read books that arouse my emotions and that teach me something.
- Larry K.Lv 77 months ago
I'd suggest you just drop the last phrase and end with "....that teach me something." Adding "whether in knowledge or even just in wisdom" is unnecessary and superfluous. There really is no difference between knowledge and wisdom. Knowledge is necessary to acquire wisdom and writing "just in wisdom" implies that wisdom is inferior to knowledge, which is illogical.
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- BBagwindsLv 77 months ago
I like to read books with interesting storylines which elicit the emotions and instill knowledge and wisdom.
- MarcLv 77 months ago
NO! Run-on sentence. If I have time i will correct. Later.
K, I'm out. You got good answers. I can't improve perfection. Thanks, crew!
- NormanLv 77 months ago
Storylines. Lose the word "that" before teach.