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Short story ideas 12 year old Girl named Amira sees fox in the woods. It’s domestic. Parents don’t like the fox. Parents like brother better than her because he wants to be a pilot. She keeps it in her room as a secret. Sometimes the fox makes noises but she cannot understand him. One day after school when her... show more Short story ideas
12 year old Girl named Amira sees fox in the woods. It’s domestic.
Parents don’t like the fox. Parents like brother better than her because he wants to be a pilot.
She keeps it in her room as a secret. Sometimes the fox makes noises but she cannot understand him.
One day after school when her parents aren’t home she lets the fox outside.
It starts running into the forest and she chases it alarmed.
Runs through Michigan cherry orchard and out to the shoreline.
She falls into the sand (allusion of Alice in Wonderland) and goes to another world.
It’s snowy like Norway. Northern lights and imagery usage. The fox’s fur turns white. The fox welcomes her to his own world. Fox is named Ezra.
Owls honor her and welcome her.
Animals welcome her to this new world, but she’s concerned and wants to return home.
The animals tell her to see their leader, but are sad she wants to leave. She says it isn’t her home.
Goes on a quest to find the leader.
Eventually she looks at her reflection and is magically transported home.
Discovers no time has passed but feels like she should be grateful for her family.
Update: Amira is mean to her parents
Update 2: how to add originality/suggestions
Update 3: update- she's a bad student and her bro is a good student so her parents prefer her bro. i've left out a bit of details so it would be concise, so please don't ask specific questions about the plot
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