Does this topic senetence make sense?

Hi, I am writing an essay and this is one of my topic sentences : "My exposure to the fire service was first introduced to me by the Cadet program in 2015. " Should I word the sentence a different way or is this good? the initial question was "Have you had any exposure to the fire service, if so... show more Hi, I am writing an essay and this is one of my topic sentences : "My exposure to the fire service was first introduced to me by the Cadet program in 2015. "

Should I word the sentence a different way or is this good?

the initial question was "Have you had any exposure to the fire service, if so please explain"

I was also thinking something like " My first time being exposed to the fire service was in 2015, by the Cadet Program"
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