I wrote another lyrics-kinda different from my previous lyrics- read it and tell me what you think. thanks.?

V-1)

I met a man

He worships a different God

And has different thoughts

I know a man

Doesn't get his right by doing wrong

He smiles through his heart

(PRE-1)

Cause he looks up at the sky

Like he sees things that we don't

got a kindness in his eyes

a kindness

That no one has seen before

(C-1)

Black is a very dark shade of white

And there's a truth behind every lie

The earth is full of sounds of footsteps

They fade,

and the footprints are all that's left behind

(V-2)

I saw a man

With a white flag on his arm

In the middle of a dusty war

I know a man

No knife behind words when he talks

And He is no one's son

(PRE-2)

So he looks up at the sun

Like he sees things that we don't

Even evil was an angel once

He says

don't judge till you feel the shoes

and i heard him saying:

(C-2)

Black is a very dark shade of white

And there's a truth behind every lie

The earth is full of sounds of footsteps

They fade,

But we all leave footprints behind

I wrote a dream on the blue sky

I'm don't want to live- I don't want to die

The earth is full of sounds of footsteps

Wish I could leave nice footprints behind

(B)

The man wakes up everyday like it's the last day

He says, oh it's never too late to change

He burned all the maps, saying: we are one

The man says just wait the best is yet to come

oh-uh

The man goes to bed every night like it's the end

The man says life's too short to fear the death

perfectly happy with things the way they are

The man says life's too short to do people wrong

Update:

The earth is full of sounds of wars

The earth is full of sounds of bombs

The earth is full of sounds of guns

The earth is full of sounds of us

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  • 3 years ago
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    Your ideas are good, but you are struggling to go one direction with them. It's like you aren't sure how to say what you feel.

    The piece seems Christian, but you are afraid to say it is. The line walking isn't helping your delivery. I'd write it blatantly Christian first, get it off your chest. Then, see if there's a way to put it in a style such as artists like Kansas, Mr. Mister, Jars of Clay or another quasi-Christian, spiritually-based band. You might end up with two distinctly different songs.

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