My new poem, honest thoughts and opinions?
Ice dripping, cold sweat
strong hold, hot breathe
My finger lingers with everything faint whisper
Bloody dashes, pulsing vein
The black and blue tell a story
Of pleasure born from pain
Of beauty sprung from sin
Of my desire within the fire
And our flesh intertwined all day
Before our love died in the mire
- 2 years agoFavorite Answer
Not bad at all. Good internal rhyme, not cliché to the point of overdone, succinct. Good jib.
- SKITTZOLv 72 years ago
My thoughts are this..
Whip me bloody,beat me right,
you won't see me after tonight.
- ShazyLv 42 years ago
Gosh! It just gets better every time you retell it mate! I'm flattered that you used my "ice" word to start it off!
I thought it was about self harm this time!
Good grief! Is that how you make love?
- 2 years ago
I like it, poems about love are the best :)