What do you think about this poem so far?

I listen to the heavy rain 6 Fighting the overwhelming tears 7 Trying to overlook the pain 6 Even though it's been two years 7 Still, my thoughts will cling to the past 6 you've given me a second chance 7 I hoped it would last 6 but, was taken in a glance 7 though your deaths are brother 6 memories... show more I listen to the heavy rain 6
Fighting the overwhelming tears 7
Trying to overlook the pain 6
Even though it's been two years 7

Still, my thoughts will cling to the past 6
you've given me a second chance 7
I hoped it would last 6
but, was taken in a glance 7

though your deaths are brother 6
memories won't fall apart 7
my own Mother and Father 6
You will forever be in my heart 7
Sukoshi demo aetara ureshii na 11
(I would be happy to see you even a short period of time)
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