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Question

Survey result suggested that

online shop is prevalent

in Hong Kong .

Although only 76(person) of the

respondents said they had not been

used online shop. Still have 124(person)

use online shop

Via the result of the analysis,

which reveals that adult have

High consumption ability .

Because most adult have been working

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調查結果顯示出大部份香港人都有瀏覽網上商店的習慣

雖然只有76人

受訪者表示，他們沒有經常瀏覽網上商店。

不過仍然有124人會瀏覽網上商店

通過分析的結果，

這顯示出成人有高消費能力。

因為大多數成人已經投入社會

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Most people are spent 0-1 hour

on online shop.

An overwhelming majority (122 person)

Of the respondents think that until they

have needs .Otherwise never browse .

Usually do not spend too much time

browsing

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大多數人都花了0-1小時

在網上商店上。

絕大多數人（122人)

認為，直到他們有需求。

否則不會瀏覽網上商店。

而瀏覽時通常不會花太多時間

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This report provides information by questionnaire,

regarding the Online shopping (sometimes known as e-tail

from "electronic retail" or e-shopping) is a form of electronic commerce which allows consumers to directly buy goods or services from a seller over the Internet using a web browser.

This report will pay particular attention to Online shop shopping usage and penetration in Adults and teenager.

It will highlight major some explanation for observed changes.

This report will explain Online shop usage and penetration

in Adults and teenager.

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The survey result suggests that most of the HK people have the habits of browsing the contents of online shops. Although there are 76 respondents said they didn’t have that habit, but the other 124 respondents expressed that they did.

調查結果顯示出大部份香港人都有瀏覽網上商店的習慣

雖然只有76人受訪者表示，他們沒有經常瀏覽網上商店。

不過仍然有124人會瀏覽網上商店

Through the result of the analysis, we can see high the consumption abilities of adults, and the situation owing to the majority of adults possessing jobs.

通過分析的結果，

這顯示出成人有高消費能力。

因為大多數成人已經投入社會

Most of the people are spent 0-1 hour on to browse online shops.

but an overwhelming majority (122 persons) of the respondents think thought that they would not do that until they needed them .Otherwise never browse , and they usually do did not spend too much time for browsing

大多數人都花了0-1小時在網上商店上。

絕大多數人（122人)認為，直到他們有需求，否則不會瀏覽網上商店。

而瀏覽時通常不會花太多時間

This report provides gathers the information by questionnaire. regarding The online shopping (sometimes known as “e-tail”from "electronic retail" or e-shopping) is a form of electronic commerce which allows consumers to directly buy goods or services from a seller over that on the Internet using via a web browser.

This report will pay particular attention to the online shop shopping usages and penetration in adults and teenager, and It will highlights some major some explanations for the changing of observation changes. This report will explain online shop usage and penetrationin Adults and teenager.

此段的 the report will……………. 使用未來式，是因該報告尚未完成嗎？如已完成應使用過去式。