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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 6 years ago

想問問這篇英文文章有沒有錯語法 20點

Counting Himedia Unit Limited company is a professional computer hardware company established in 1993.Now,we have over than 300 staffs. Our office is located in the Mong Kok. Because It can make us easy to trade. We are medium sized company. It has over 20 years of experience, providing recycling, trading, upgrade personal computer services. Also, our advantage is low cost to operate. We will provide the most appropriate service to customer.

According to a survey completed by the student of school learn facilities. We find that the current Personal Computer not efficient enough for student to do their assignments. We will convince the school to join our plan. Also, the main purpose of our plan is to upgrade and recycle their outdated PC. Besides, we will depend on the customer's money, the requirements for computer to choose the most suitable plan.

Regarding the reason, the main reason of student is get poor grades in School. Also, they not motivate to do their homework when the personal computer is very slow. In addition, they cannot install more software since their hard disk capacity is low. So, they cannot open too many software. Moreover, if there have a high version software need to upgrade, their pc cannot bear.

Concerning our services, we will upgrade and recycle the outdated facilities. We will offer you the lowest price to upgrade and highest price to recovery outdated facilities. We will ensure that the customer's confidential information will be destroyed.

謝謝各位大大幫忙>< 這是這幾天要用的講稿

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(Besides, we will depend on customer's money, the requirements for computer to choose the most suitable plan.)這一句不是看的很懂

這句我想表達 另外,我們會視乎顧客的金錢和對電腦要求而選擇適合的計劃

(Regarding the reason, the main reason of student is get poor grades in School.) 這一句也看不懂 @@

這句我想表達 根據原因, 主要原因是學生在學校拿到差的成績

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  • ???
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    6 years ago
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    Counting Himedia Unit Limited is a professional computer hardware company established in 1993.Now,we have "more" than 300 staffs. Our office is located in Mong Kok, because it "makes it easier for" us to trade. We are "a" medium sized company "with" over 20 years of experience. "We" provide recycling, trading, upgrading "of" personal computer services. Also, "we operate at low low costs, which is one of our advantages." We can provide the most appropriate service to customers.

    According to a survey completed by the students of school learning facilities, we found that the current Personal Computers are not efficient enough for students to do their assignments. We will convince the school to join "in on" our plan. The main purpose of our plan is to upgrade and recycle their outdated PC.

    (Besides, we will depend on customer's money, the requirements for computer to choose the most suitable plan.)這一句不是看的很懂

    (Regarding the reason, the main reason of student is get poor grades in School.) 這一句也看不懂 @@

    Also, they "are not" motivated to do their homework when "their" personal computer are very slow. In addition, they cannot install more software since their hard disk capacity is too low. So, they cannot open too many softwares. Moreover, if there "are" high version softwares "that" need to "be" upgrade, their pc cannot bear it.

    Concerning our services, we will upgrade and recycle the outdated equipments. We will offer you the lowest price for upgrade and highest price for recovering outdated equipments. We ensure that customer's confidential information will be "deleted"

    There are many parts of your article that I did not understand. If you want me to correct them, please explain them to me.

    2014-05-27 22:32:54 補充:

    另外,我們會視乎顧客的金錢和對電腦要求而選擇適合的計劃

    In addition, we will take customers' finance and computer requirements into consideration when selecting the most appropriate plan that suits them the most.

    根據原因, 主要原因是學生在學校拿到差的成績

    According to the reason, this is the main reason why students get poor grades at school

    2014-05-27 22:33:54 補充:

    字數有限所以只好放意見裡 希望對你有幫助喔~^^

    2014-05-28 22:55:23 補充:

    請檢察意見區~

    2014-06-04 00:45:42 補充:

    According to surveys and analysis, it has been proven that students are achieving poor scores at school as they possess computers that are slow in speed that demotivates them from finishing their homework.

    sorry lo~

    2014-06-04 00:55:14 補充:

    BTW thanks for correcting me, I just never understood what he/she was trying to say (根據原因, 主要原因) not 根據分析(調查)

    Source(s): 自己 希望對你有幫助 ^^
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  • 5 years ago

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    6 years ago

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    6 years ago

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  • 6 years ago

    Counting Himedia Unit Limited company is a professional computer hardware company established in 1993. Currently, we have a workforce of over 300 employees. Our office is located in the Mong Kok District because it can make us easier to trade. Our company is a medium sized scale with over 20 years of solid experience in providing recycling, trading, upgrading personal computer services and so forth. Also, our goal is to provide the most appropriate service to customer at the optimal cost-effective operation.

    According to a survey conducted by the Student of School Learning Facilities, it shows that the current personal computer fails to perform efficiently and adequately for students to do their assignments. We strongly advise the schools to join our service plan which is mainly to upgrade and recycle their outdated PCs. Besides, we are prudent to choose the very best suitable plan based on their requirements of computers and budget concerns.

    Regarding the students having poor grades in school, the key factor is the lack of motivation to do their homework due to the slow speed performance personal computer, the failure to install more software into their relative low hard disk capacities that cannot manage and execute too many tasks. Hence, if there is an upgrade version software available in the market, their personal computers are unable to further upgrade.

    By taking use of our services to upgrade and recycle the outdated facilities, we will offer you the lowest price to upgrade and the highest price to recovery outdated facilities. We guarantee that the customer's confidential information will becompletely removed.

    2014-06-03 00:33:50 補充:

    另外,我們會視乎顧客的金錢和對電腦要求而選擇適合的計劃

    In addition, we will take customers' finance and computer requirements into consideration when selecting the most appropriate plan that suits them the most.

    The most appropriate plan = suits them the most...

    (重復意思)

    2014-06-03 00:39:32 補充:

    根據原因, 主要原因是學生在學校拿到差的成績

    According to the reason, this is the main reason why students get poor grades at school

    中文也有表達問題....是否根據分析(調查),?

    According to the survey or analysis, students get poor scores at school is the main reason.

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