比比 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 7 years ago

有關於修改英檢初級複試段落寫作文批改的即時疑問~急急急~><

以下是我剛剛寫好的英文作文:

This spring break, I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by bicycle. I started from Taipei101, and rode toward the south first. In Taichung, I visited the beautiful park and ate some its famous food, Sun cakes, there. Then, on my way to Kenting National Park, I accidentally fell off my bicycle. It hurt so much, but I didn't give up. I finally got back to my sweet home and saw my parents waiting at the door. They ha been waiting for me for a while. After this cycling tour, I felt I had become brave enough to do anything on my own!

在下想問問現在有在線上的英文作文很強的大大~

能現在就評出分數ㄇ~????><

我後天就要考英檢初級的複試了~

所以很緊張想了解我可以拿到幾分~><

a.s.a.p

拜託了~><

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  • 7 years ago
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    This spring break vacation I went on a cycling tour of going around Taiwan by my bicycle. I started from Taipei101 building, and rode toward to the South first. In Taichung, I visited the beautiful Taichung Park and ate some its famous food, Sun Cakes, there. Then, keeping going on my way to Kenting, the national park at the southern end of the island, in the way, I accidentally fell off from my bicycle, it hurt so much badly, but I didn't give up, so I finally could get back to my sweet home and saw my parents waiting at the door, they had been waited for me for a while. After this cycling tour, I felt I had become more brave, enough to do anything on my own!

    1.break 指短暫的休息如工作中的tea break,如指假期,指只短暫數日的假期如週末,像寒、暑假長時間的假日不適用break, 應使用vacation.2.ride toward the south first 先騎向南方,此句似有語意是否精準的問題,如旅程由台北開始,先到南部,再東南部、東北部,最後回到西北部,而文字上的”先騎向南方”,而不是”先到南部” ride to the South first, 那在抵達南部前,會否有突然改變方向” then ride toward the east”的可能(在到達南部前,應不會有突然騎向中央山脈的可能,但文字ride toward the south first 並沒有排除這樣的可能性),我的意思是說,語意的表達沒有一次到位,有被曲解的可能。南部 the South 之s必須大寫。 3. They had been waiting for me for a while 過去完成進行式,是在過去的某一時間`完成後,該情況仍持續進行的意思,但父母親應只會等到您回到家為止,就不再等下去,因此應改用用過去完成式。4.台中公園、太陽餅是專有名詞,故公園及餅字須大寫,餅使用單數。5.第一段”騎單車進行單車環台旅行”,單車環台當然是騎單車,因此”騎單車”是多餘的字,在不刪去的情況下,索性加上my “騎我自已的單車”做為一種補充性的敘述。6.fall off是質量下降的意思,從何處掉落 fall from.7.national park國家公園非專有名詞,第一個字毌不大寫。

    2014-04-18 22:37:40 補充:

    是環島嗎?還是僅是一次台灣的單車旅行"tour of Taiwan"? 我會錯意嗎?

    2014-04-19 08:55:39 補充:

    修正第一行為

    This spring vacation I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by my bicycle.

    但我不了解,如不是環島,為何會先向南方行?

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    7 years ago

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  • 7 years ago

    4級分沒問題了

    流暢度夠+文法OK

    也有機會到5級分

    但注意一點 你寫太多了

    題目要求50字

    最大極限就是壓縮在70~80字內

    有些評分人員 可能會覺得你寫太多廢話

    所以斟酌給分

    也有些評分人員 會覺得50字算蝦米!?

    100字寫得卡詳細啦 這樣

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  • 7 years ago

    你這個實力初級複試一定過的了阿

    滿分100的話 成績大概85吧

    感覺文章挺順暢的 結尾結的也挺好

    Source(s): 自己
  • 7 years ago

    I know......XD

    but I just want to know it

    I'm so nervous about the GEPT 's writing test >

  • 7 years ago

    I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by bicycle ==>I went on a tour of Taiwan by bicycle

    They ha been waiting for ==>They have been waiting for

    Score is not everything, learning good English is.

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