我的英文一直不是很好... 但是我還是試著讓自己的英文更好 畢竟要考上比較好得學校英文絕對是重要的
In the past,I did not work hard at school,so my grade in any tests never be good in that time.Until the day,my classmate told me "If you did not do well on your test,how would you go ti a great school in the future?" Then I started to think what he tole to me.
If I could,t go to a school which would help me learn well in the job,I would never get a
job I wanted in the future.Afterward,I moved on to try to work hard,and the harder I did,
the higher garde I got.
In the last test,I got a good grade which I never got in the past.I was very happy,so as my teacher and my parents did.Although the classmate who told me work hard is not
keep touch with me,what he said will leave my mind!
在過去 我在學校不太認真 所以我在那時候考試的成績未曾好過 直到有一天 我的同學告訴我: 如果你在你的考試成沒辦法做得好 你如何在未來去一個好的學校? 那時我開始想他對我說了什麼
如果我沒辦法去一個能夠幫助我在工作中學習好的學校 我想我不會拿在未來得到一個自己想要的工作 之後 我開始去嘗試用功 隨著我的努力提升 我的成績也慢慢變好
在最後一次的考試 我拿到一個我曾未拿過的好成績 我非常開心 我的老師父母也是
Nessun Dorma! , TOMING88 , 理查
and I need to go to a great school where they would help me to get th
I want to get a job which I like in the future, and I need to go to a great school where they would help me to get this job.
在where they would help me to get this job 這邊 請問they是代替?
Nessun Dorma! 原來是這樣= ="
- 6 years agoFavorite Answer
英文作文的開始最好直接破題，第一句就把整個文章的重點直接點破，不要東扯西扯，這個和文化有關，不習慣這種寫法也要習慣，因為這就是真正的歐美人士寫作習慣，和文章好壞無關，就只是英語人士大多都是這樣寫作的。要想出一句主題句(topic sentence), 之後的寫作都是圍繞在這句主題句展開，盡量舉出明確或是強力例子，去支持你的主題句。
Try to tell a good story, not your story. Make your story interesting, not confusing.
I can never forget when one of my classmates had told me to study hard or I would not get good grades. What he said had changed me forever.
I did not work hard at school before, and my testing scores were not good enough either. One day, a classmate of mine told me, "if you do not do well on your exams, how will you be accepted by great schools in the future?" And then, I started to think deeper of what he meant.
I want to get a job which I like in the future, and I need to go to a great school where they would help me to get this job. Good grades will help, so I need to study hard now. He was right.
After what he said to me, I move on studying harder than before, and I get higher scores now. I even got my best scores last time in my exam, which I could not believe before. My parents, my teacher and myself are all very happy.
I am very thankful to this classmate of mine and to what he said to me, even though we don't keep in touch anymore. I can never forget his sentence to me.
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2013-11-24 03:12:51 補充：
where "they" would help me 的 they就是你夢想中未來學校裡面的教授們，學長姐們，學校裡面都是人啊! XD
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2013-11-26 08:21:27 補充：
英文學習的問題可以多上來問，大家都會盡量幫你的，這裡比我專業的人大有人在! ^^Source(s): 拜託你一定要拿高分, http://tw.knowledge.yahoo.com/question/question?qi...
- Anonymous6 years ago
- TOMING88Lv 76 years ago
Error and correction on good grammar and sequence of tense, faithful to your original 15/20; great school=college;on "A Piece of Advice"-----
---I can never forget when one of my classmates had told me to study hard or I would not get good grades.What he said had changed me forever.
---I did not worked hard at school before. One day, a classmate of mine said to me,"If you do not do well in your exams., how will you be accepted by (great school=college.) in the future ?"Then I started to think deeply of what he meant.
---I want to get a right job which I like in the future; and I need to go to (a great school=college.)where it would help me to get the right job. Good grades will help as I have asked myself. So I needed to study hard. He was right.
---After what he said to me, I moved (decided) on studying harder than ever before; and I got higher scores now. I even got my best scores last time in my exams., which I could not believe before. My parents, my teachers, and myself were all very happy.
---I am very grateful to this classmate of mine and to what he said to me;even though we didn't keep in touch anymore.I can never forget his piece of advice to me !
- prisoner26535Lv 76 years ago
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- BethLv 76 years ago
以下, 我只針對文法部分在你的原本文章上修改, 我另外用橘色字體寫一段同樣意思的文字讓你比較:
In the past,I did not work hard at school, so my grade in any tests was never be good in that time. (前面講過 in the past了, 此處又加上 in that time, 似乎是形容一段時間. 可以刪掉後面, 或是前面的時間講得具體一點)
Until the Till one day, my classmate told me, "If you diddo not do well on your tests, how wouldcan you go tito a great school in the future?" Then I started to think what he tole tohad said to me. (引述的句子用當時時態)
I asked myself, "If I could,tcan't go to a school which wouldwill help me learn well in the job, I wouldwill never get a job I wanted in the future."
Afterward, I moved on to try to work hard, and the harder I did, the higher garde I got. (改用 decide 較好)
In the last test, I got a good grade which I never got in the past. I was very happy, so wereas my teacher and my parents did. Although the classmate who told me to work hard isdoes not keep in touch with me any more, what he have said will leave live(or stay) in my mind!
I must admit that I was not a good student as the fact that I never paid enough attention to my schoolworks before. Until one day, one of my classmate told me, "If you can't get good scores on the tests right now, how can you possibly get into a good university in the future?" I was so shocked at that moment, and started to think about what he said. Indeed, I need to take responsibility of my own life. In order to get a decent job in the future, there is no reason for me to fool around any more. From then on, I decided to turn over a new leaf. I tried hard to review all the lessons after class and to spend more time preparing for the exams to come. It turned out that the more endeavor I made, the better grades I got. In the previous exam, I got a high grade which I never had and never thought I could have before. Although the classmate who inspired me no longer keeps in touch with me, his words will remain on my mind for good.
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