Mouse asked in 社會與文化語言 · 7 years ago

初級英檢作文

請幫我改改下面英文錯誤的地方 ..

請告訴我應該怎樣寫會比較順暢 ..

滿分五分這樣寫大概可以拿幾分?

請告訴我寫的作文其中文法錯誤!!

感恩

Little Paul is very likes to eat ice cream, chocolate, candy and small cake, but he does

not like to brush his teeth.

One day, his teeth hurt badly.

His mother took him to dentist to watch his teeth.

Paul shoot and cried loudly at dentist store.

After that, little Paul said he will not to do that again.

Update:

大大啊

可以講仔細一點嗎:>

Update 2:

請問我的作文是否就只有這些錯誤(?

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  • 7 years ago
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    is very likes 改成 really likes 比較恰當

    watch his teeth 改成 check his teeth

    to do 改成 do 就好

    2013-08-11 18:02:06 補充:

    is 後面不能直接加 like

    因為兩個動詞不能擺在一起

    看牙齒 本來就是用 check 不能用watch

    will 是助動詞 後面不用加 to 直接寫動詞原形就好 : D

    2013-08-12 21:49:09 補充:

    歹事

    沒看到 大叫 SHOUT

    過去式 shout shouted shouted

    shoot 是開槍射東西

    我看漏了

    真要評分的話

    初級算是很基本的

    過去式背錯是很傷的喔

    我們以十分來看好不好

    大概三點五左右

    因為你有掌握到開頭破題 又有結論

    起承轉合都有

    可是基本的文法傷太重了 導致分數不夠高

    加油吧 不用太緊張

    Source(s): 有錯還請不要吝逾賜教, 有錯還請多指教喔 人不是萬能的嘛 ~
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  • 7 years ago

    感謝樓上各位的意見~

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  • 7 years ago

    假如這是你跟美國人的對話,那是可以的。 本來人的溝通,就是能講多少算多少,無所謂對錯,對方能明白就好,不行還可以靠比手勢讓人家理解。

    但寫作時,盡量不要自己 「發明」 英語。 應該用你學過的正確說法去拼湊文章,不要天馬行空,想一堆很美好的中文,然後用錯誤的英文翻譯,這等於明白告訴閱卷者你無法使用英文表達看法。分數一路扣下來,會很低。

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  • 7 years ago

    In your writing, using "is very likes", "watch his teeth", "dentist store", "will not to" indicates that you THINK in Chinese, and then translate into English. To avoid this kind of problem, you shall gradually train to think in English.

    2013-08-10 21:41:28 補充:

    Only when you can think in English while using English, then your English will be English English not Chinese English.

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