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Anonymous asked in 社會及文化語言 · 8 years ago

怎樣重寫這句

"A Bar with a spectacular night view attached to the Banquet Hall "YODO""

想說的是在Banquet Hall "YODO",附設有可以觀賞迷人夜景的Bar.

怎樣寫這一句會更好?

謝謝!

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  • 8 years ago
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    Your phrase uses the Bar as the subject. Therefore a verb phrase can be added after it to further describe the Bar. Also, the phrase try to zoom out from the bar to the Banquet Hall Yodo, but the "with a spectacular night view" in the middle interrupts the effect of zooming. This is undesirable but can be corrected by:

    "The bar attached to the Banquet Hall Yodo has a spectacular night view."

    If your sentence aim to bring tourists from the Hall to the Bar, then you should use:

    "The Banquet Hall Yodo includes a bar, in which visitors can have a spectacular night view."

    In short, how you arrange the three elements in the sentence depends on what effect you want to make on readers. With three elements, I do not recommend you to combine the three elements as a phrase. This will force the fourth element to be included in the same sentence, and make it clumsy to read or listen to.

  • Anonymous
    8 years ago

    重寫"A Bar with a spectacular night view attached to the Banquet Hall "YODO""

    翻譯「在Banquet Hall "YODO",附設有可以觀賞迷人夜景的Bar. 」時,我會用annex寫附設,appreciate the view寫觀賞,enchanting寫迷人和night scenery 寫夜景。

    全句寫成:

    "Annexed to Banquet Hall "YODO"is a bar where people can appreciate the view of enchanting night scenery."

    2013-06-05 20:40:54 補充:

    spectacular壯觀

    enchanting迷人

    attach連接

    include包括

    annex附設

    have有

    appreciate欣賞

    Source(s): with the bar upstairs rather than annexed to the restaurant-http://www.thecriticalcouple.com/1/post/2013/05/so... Enjoy a Tour of Kyoto’s Enchanting Night Scenery-http://www.kyoto-lab.jp/kanko/kyoto_nightbus_eng.h...
  • ?
    Lv 7
    8 years ago

    Mainly on the Bar;

    The greatly appreaciate bar, attached to the Banquet Hall "YODO"

    , has a spectacular night view.

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