佳蓉 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 7 years ago

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One day, a boy is called John, taking the bus go to school. He played cellphone and sit on Priority Seat. He focused on cellphone so that don't want to take the seat for the old man. Pretending missing him, he go on siting on Priority Seat.

Soon after, John was broken a feet when he played basketball. Next time , he took the bus that he walked with a crutch. There has a girl sit on Priority Seat. She was reading book and missing his feet was broken. John was feeling very ashamed and sad that he remember he was same with the girl.

After that time , he learned what the courtesy is . And he begin take seat for who need it.

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  • 7 years ago
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    ---One day a boy called John was taking the bus to school.

    ---He played cellphone and sat on Priority Seat.

    ---Focusing on Cellphone, he didn't want to give away the seat for the elderly man. Pretending missing him, he went on playing and sitting.

    -----Soon afterwards, John had hurt his leg when he played basketball.

    -----When next time he took the bus as he walked on crutch after the accident.

    -----There was a girl sitting on Priority Seat.

    -----She was reading a book and missing his hurt leg.

    -----John was feeling very ashamed and sad as he remembered he was in same situation existed with the girl's.

    ------After that, he learned what courtesy is.

    ------And he begins giving seat for those who needs it.

  • 7 years ago

    One day, a boy who called John was taking the bus go to school. He played cellphone and sat on the priority seat. He focused on cellphone so much that he didn't want to give up the seat to the old man. Pretending missing him, he went on sitting on the priority seat.

    Soon after, John broke his feet when he played basketball. And then, he took the bus and walked with a crutch. There was a girl sitting on the priority seat. She was reading book and missing his feet was broken. John felt very ashamed and sad that he remembered that he did the same thing as the girl.

    After that time , he learned what the courtesy is . And he begins to give his seat to who needs it.

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