Nat
Lv 7
Nat asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 7 years ago

Will you read this poem, think of a title and c/c?

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At an age, before she walked,

Her eyes foretold an open heart,

Verified when first she talked.

A gift by fate she would impart..

Childhood held no special rule,

In this she held an ageless soul.

Tactless ones, so often cruel.

If just to hurt in pranks unfold.

Trusting all, she often cried,

But laughter found her feelings mend.

New adventures, plan, decide.

Few precious summers, tomboy friend.

Nature layers, covers ground.

New flower beds with bordered stone

Left untended, can't be found,

Unwritten prose, forgotten songs.

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05-20-13.

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Update:

Alternating 7, then 8 syllable count in sequence.

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  • 7 years ago
    Best Answer

    I want to call this Wildflower. It is a lovely poem, sentimental and concise.

  • 7 years ago

    Forgotten Angel

  • joy
    Lv 5
    7 years ago

    Gene.... This is a poignant and skillfully written poem .

    Because I love the last line so much, I would suggest you use

    "Forgotten Songs" as a Title.

  • 7 years ago

    I will leave you to decide your own title,

    it is a poem which speaks for many, hits a nerve in the reader and

    as they have expressed I know this to be true, I simply want to scoop it up

    the child within and nurture it.

    third verse needs punctuation, maybe?

    but laughter found - her feelings mend

    but laughter found; her feelings mend

    but laughter, found - her feelings mend... I do not know but without a break it trips me.

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  • 7 years ago

    Lament

  • 7 years ago

    Gene I cried, thank you.

    I've been there, perhaps long ago, to know the bullying was ignorant, but freeing to those who imposed it.

    I always, at some point after, knew I could be salved by a hug at home, alerting me, "You are not alone."

  • 7 years ago

    This is beautiful Gene.

    Cannot think of a title that would match the poignant beauty of your lines.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    It's a very good poem Gene. Keep it in a folder with your selected ones.

    G.

  • 7 years ago

    I also found tears slipping , as I read this;

    Your summarising lines might be interpreted to mean

    that little alters, although people grow in size.

    I might call it, `Forgone Truths `, Gene.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    If I were titling this poem I would call it: Her Life

    I think its a great poem, that evokes a lot of imagery...good job

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