Someone asked in 社會及文化語言 · 7 years ago

英文作文差~幫改文

題目:(you are a reporter for your school newspaper.one of the teachers of your school,mr lee, became a hero yesterday)

On one day, mr lee was walking home from school. during he was walking moment, he was heard something. just like someone to say help help me. and then he saw a robber

from a handbag from an old woman, and then the robber is running very fast. so mr lee saw this situation, then he was try to chase the robber, and mr lee said that stop , do not run. i must be catch you. give me your hand bag. after that, the robber do not be careful to tripped over a rubbish bin. so mr lee is successful to catch the robber and the returned the handbag to the old woman. she said that thank you very much sir. finally mr lee call to 999 to police. so the robber catch to by police.

P.S.有咩方法令作文好D

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  • 7 years ago
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    Yesterday, while walking home after leaving school, one of our school’s teachers Mr Lee heard someone yelling for help. He thus looked around and saw an old woman being robbed by a young man, who ran away quickly after snatching the old woman’s handbag from her hand. Seeing this, Mr Lee ran after him without a second thought.

    ‘’Stop! Don’t run,’’ Mr Lee kept shouting while chasing the man ‘’I will catch you. Return the handbag now!’’

    Then, all of a sudden, the man carelessly tripped over a rubbish bin ahead of him. Mr Lee hurried forward and curbed the man at once. After that, Mr Lee returned the handbag to the old woman having just managed to catch up with him, who said gratefully ‘’Thank you so much, sir.’’

    Mr Lee then called the police with his Android phone. Finally, several policemen arrived and arrested the man.

    With no doubts, Mr Lee has become our hero. His courage and sense of justice definitely deserve our recognition and praise.

    我覺得第一步係學好基本grammar同sentence structure,如果依啲唔掂,你之後DSE考英文會好難過3/4。

    第二,學多啲vocabulary同phrases,最忌學啲又難又冇咩機會用到嘅字,記住用淺字好過用錯字。

    學一個字要留意佢係verb,adjective,noun定係adverb,仲要知係喺咩場合用。好多時一個字唔啱唔係grammar有問題,而係用法(usage)錯咗。

    多啲用 connectives 同複句(有 , 果啲)令內容更連貫。

    最後最重要,睇多啲英文,建議BBC。

    希望幫到你。

    2013-05-19 16:16:00 補充:

    BBC (專為 English learner 而設嘅版本)

    http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/

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  • 7 years ago

    改:

    On one day, mr lee was walking home from school. During he was walking moment, he was heard something. Just like someone to say ‘help !help! me.’ and then he saw a robber from a handbag from an old woman, and then the robber is running very fast. so mr lee saw this situation, then he was try to chase the robber, and mr lee said that ‘Stop! ,Don’t run!’ I have to catch you. Give me your handbag. After that, the robber do not be careful to tripped over a rubbish bin. So Mr lee is successful to catch the robber and the returned the handbag to the old woman. The old woman is thankful for Mr Lee. Finally, Mr lee called 999 to police, so the robber catch to by police.

    The robber, deserve!

    注:大小皆,Grammar

    2013-05-19 09:56:44 補充:

    read more English novel

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  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    Mr.Lee was walking home from school on one day. During his walkingjourney, he heard something.like “please help me,” then he saw a robber stole a handbag from an old woman. Hence the robberran away very fast, so Mr. Lee tried his best to chase the robber. Mr.Lee shouted to the robber, “Stop , do not run. I will catch you. Give me back the handbag.” Right after that, the robber tripped over a rubbish binby accident. Thus Mr. Lee was successful to catch the robber and returned thehandbag to the old woman. She said thank you very much to Mr. Lee. Finally Mr. Lee dialed 999 toget a hold of the Police, and the Police handled the matter thereafter.P.S. To improve your writing skills, reading different types of English books on a regular basis can certainly help. It will help you to upgrade your vocabulary power and enhance your grammartical skill. You must be persistent though. And miracles will not happen overnight.

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  • 7 years ago

    Error and correction on the composition:-

    One day, Mr. Lee was walking home from school.

    While he was walking he heard something.

    It was someone trying to say "help,help!"

    Then he saw a robber snatching a handbag from an old woman and was running very fast.

    When Mr.Lee saw this situation, he was trying to chase the robber by calling "Stop;Don't run;Catching you; Give me your handbag !"

    After that the robber was not careful enough to trip over a rubbish bin !

    So Mr.Lee was successful to catch the robber and returned the handbag to the old woman.

    She said, " Thank you, Sir."

    Finally Mr.Lee called 999 to police so the robber was caught at last by police.

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    Read the grammar syntax for linguistic terms to improve your writing.

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