Two Flies in Love is beautiful. Can you improve "The Fly Whisperer," and improve upon this poem?
Please pay tribute to these special animals who bring us such happiness. Your C.C. and comments are always welcome. This is an edit job from a poem months back, now re-worked some bit but in truth, am working on another poem and needed a break, and this was just what the Fly Whisperer ordered. Fiction based on fact, this is a tale of a young, blue eyed altar boy who once could catch flies in mid-air or off the table, and had a good deal of kids, even adults, rooting him on at a place called Oakwood. Very cool. Those that star my poems are always appreciated as well as those who answer. Thanks, Thomas
The Fly Whisperer
Hello, let me introduce myself
My name is Kindly Plantice
I would love to share with you a talent
Many laugh, but this is no riant matter
Years ago I was nicknamed “The Fly Whisperer”
It started out harmless- as a kid; I caught flies
No, didn’t squish em, torture em; but loved them
They became more than pets, they became my life
I was able to catch them with my bare hands
Sedentary or flying, there was no escaping me
They were kept as house pets, or set free
Many times I would go for walks with a Fly
Permission granted, abscond with one long hair
Tied gently around fly’s neck we’d go for a stroll
One time I married a couple that flew off happy
Which couple enplaned happier I never found out
Finally, this got in the local news, even beyond that
I am the guy that put the fly swatter out of business
No more killing flies; the most they need is a time out
Marriages have even been saved by The Fly Whisperer
It is my fervent hope that I talk with you all again
Thank you Kindly
neonman: thanks for your answer. Okay,........... the young man catches flies. He takes a long hair from someone with long hair...and ties one end to a flies leg, and the other end to the other flies leg, and they both fly off happily ever after. Or, like I said, you want to go for a walk, take the fly with you. The rest of poem were just benefits of his talents and being able to put fly swatter out of business (fiction....of course) and save a few marriages....the metaphor of tying two closer together, or tying the know, guess did not work, or the jury is still out perhaps. :) Thomas
One thing not addressed here of yet is the question itself. Notice the request to "improve" twice for two separate things.
Oh bly me, forgot >>> thanks for the stars and answers so far. Very wonderful. Now I can get this other poem going please let it work oh Lord
Sorry for spelling error and confusion it might have had in first larger paragraphy above in add'l details, second to last line, at the end, should read "tying the knot" Tommy Hi-Hi
- Ｊｅｓｕｓ ｌｏｖｅｒ ♡❤♡Lv 77 years agoFavorite Answer
I find this to be , once again ,
another interesting read and
again , a smile on my face . .
Not to take away from your
talent , but it doesn't take
much to put a smile on my
face :D lol
I found it to be not only a simple
(simple as in understanding:P)
.. but one that showed compassion
as well as an interesting topic .
I love anything that has a good ending.
It can have a sad ending as long as
there is compassion , I'm good .
You see , I am a compassionate
person (most of the time) don't get
me wrong , I can get stupid :D
especially when it comes to bullies
or animal abuse .
Don't let the angel face fool ya lol
that's what my friends at work are
quick to tell the new comers . .
and that's a good thing , bc I"m
the first one to back someone up
that is being mistreated .
I look at myself sometimes , and
who am I? :) I hurt when I see someone
else hurt , I cry often over it and
I am down for days .... (real life or TV)
it doesn't matter . You hurt , I hurt .
Then again sometimes , I get stupid
and go off ..
Who am I ? sometimes Idk
bc sometimes I fear how I will
I'd never hurt anyone or anything ,
I say that and I really feel that way ,
but I would squash a fly in a
Cute story and I find Kindly Plantice
inspirational . How strange is that ?
for me , not strange at all , for
prolly so .
I liked it . Why can't we all just
get along . . . .
@Yorkshire Man .. Mothers are so beautiful . Srry to hear ab your mother / Dementia
-New name? Doubting Thomas :)
ＧＯＤ ＢＬＥＳＳ ＹＯＵ ＡＬＬ
Thumbs up for everyone :) no worries , those that TD are just jealous ....
don't let them bother you .
- dumb bunnyLv 46 years ago
Some years back I kept a Praying Mantis as a pet, and they only eat live food! Consequently, I acquired the skill of GENTLY capturing live flies in flight, or off any surface, so that I could feed my Mantis uninjured and active prey. Most moving incident was late one night when on arrival home I found my Mantis shedding its skin. I watched, enthralled, for over an hour and I shall never forget seeing my Mantis gradually extend and spread its brand new rainbow-shimmering wings. Next day I released it onto a grapevine in my garden, the same garden in which I subsequently found a swarm of very tiny, recently hatched mantids! They are the cutest little creatures you could ever imagine.
- Selane ®Lv 47 years ago
Sorry to say but my frog just swallowed one. I hope it wasn't an offspring of the couple you married.
- LorryLv 47 years ago
You have opened my eyes.. another way to see the humble pest.. I could not help but cackle as i read another of your brilliant poems Bri.. Hilarious and yet insightful... It makes me think of how i once felt as a child and even now to this day, about animals.. I often imagined how they must feel and what they would say if only they could speak.. Can't say as i ever loved flies though..lol.. but now i have a different perspective on them.. If they stay outside their marriages will last here too..lol. (-:
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- william wLv 67 years ago
Thomas, Here's the definition of a FIGHT---one of your flies lands on a piece of the Cheese Whisperers cheese----yeeech! Anyway, a very imaginative write(whether auto-biographical or not).I wouldn't change anything. An animal got down in the flupipe of my furnace about a month ago, and for two weeks or so I had at least 10 flies a day in my house.I had to hang up the fly paper---should I have started a kennel?--------------Good Job-------william
- NatLv 77 years ago
Much more feasible than "A Flea Circus"
Unique story, well penned into an interesting read, DT
- Hope Leslie ShyLv 77 years ago
I don't like flies, but they are a very important part of the food chain, as other animals eat them or their offspring.
- 7 years ago
Such a unique poem ( that's the truth no compliment) New idea knitted with fine threads of words. I think these poems should not be confined to the stars or comments of YA ( I hope I am wrong) and that you do share them with the world, and if you don't then I hope you give my advise a second thought :) Good luck ... a thumb down to whoever thumbs me down ^_^
- Anonymous7 years ago
And I thought I had an imagination, Yes I know I have one. Thomas! you beat the crap out of mine Bro, I'm ok with that, no! honest injun I am.
I read it once again thinking some of it might rub orf onto me. Thomas I feel an idea coming, quick write some more...lol
On a serious note T, I really didn't know what to make of it, that is when my old mum steps in and covers my a.s.s. Do you know she was eighty years old in early stages of dementia before I realized that this woman, my mother WAS A REAL FUNNY PERSON WITH A GREAT SENSE OF HUMOUR.
- THE BANNIBAL ONELv 77 years ago
More of a biography then a poem.
No,I'm not a story writer,
Can not improve.
Flies alight on the nastiest piles.