What are your c/c's of this poem, The Coming of Dread?

The Coming of Dread It sweeps down like a huge black crow, flapping wings in the wind the sole warning of descent. Its shadow blocks the sun as it lands and regally swivels its head. This scavenger of souls, with talons fatal to prey in their grip. You cover your head with your arms for... show more The Coming of Dread

It sweeps down like a huge black crow,
flapping wings in the wind
the sole warning of
descent.
Its shadow blocks the sun
as it lands and regally
swivels its head.
This scavenger of souls,
with talons fatal to
prey in their grip.
You cover your head with your
arms for protection,
but an approaching dark cloud
smothers the blue from
your sky.
The flapping sound reaches
a deafening crescendo,
driving you ultimately
mad.
You surrender,
lie still,
as their beaks peck at
your eyes,
waiting for the
nightmare
to be over.
Update: Edit: Please change last line to:
to end.
Update 2: Thank you, Thomas, but you are correct with "The BirdS." It starts with only one crow landing, but that approaching dark cloud is a whole slew of 'em, coming in for attack, which is why the flapping becomes deafening. I would have emailed this to you, but looks like you closed that option. This... show more Thank you, Thomas, but you are correct with "The BirdS." It starts with only one crow landing, but that approaching dark cloud is a whole slew of 'em, coming in for attack, which is why the flapping becomes deafening. I would have emailed this to you, but looks like you closed that option.

This poem could be about depression, fear, a feeling of doom, pain, anything.
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