What are your c/c's of this poem, The Coming of Dread?
The Coming of Dread
It sweeps down like a huge black crow,
flapping wings in the wind
the sole warning of
Its shadow blocks the sun
as it lands and regally
swivels its head.
This scavenger of souls,
with talons fatal to
prey in their grip.
You cover your head with your
arms for protection,
but an approaching dark cloud
smothers the blue from
The flapping sound reaches
a deafening crescendo,
driving you ultimately
as their beaks peck at
waiting for the
to be over.
Edit: Please change last line to:
Thank you, Thomas, but you are correct with "The BirdS." It starts with only one crow landing, but that approaching dark cloud is a whole slew of 'em, coming in for attack, which is why the flapping becomes deafening. I would have emailed this to you, but looks like you closed that option.
This poem could be about depression, fear, a feeling of doom, pain, anything.
- doeLv 77 years agoFavorite Answer
I have never been able to put that feeling into words- this to me is perfect! I have had those feelings before the crows come - all my life. I have prayed not to know because it scares me knowing I have no idea what will be, I have no way of stopping it, but I know it's coming. Oh ma I love you so much for this and I hug you and pray- be strong and brave.
- Anonymous7 years ago
I think this is a wonder-write. It reminds me of the feed back this would fester if I posted this type of poem on my facebook page. My brother would have the white coat cops after me. This is why I don't dare share some of my dark stuff of facebook. Here, however, where many understand the art of poetry and the many different faces it wears, this type of write brings praises from those who are able to think in many dimensions. I think it is an amazing work.
- 7 years ago
The Bluebird Of Happiness?
- ThomasLv 77 years ago
You write in a way that I just do not know how too, but I could
not improve upon this at all, though I am sure you could.
This was gripping to me from the start, and to its climatic finish,
and what is similar to what I try to do at least is take the reader
to your 'space' wherever you have decided. Here, I felt like I was
in the movie "The Birds" except take the 's' off the end, and I must
deal with the talons of this one nemesis for my survival.
Wonderful imagery you created, and not overplayed, just enough
to sink myself into one hell of a nightmare tonight. lol
Edit: Whew, Man O' Beanie, look at them TD's. I tell you it's amazing.
Look at my answer. Oh well. Lord bless em.
Ma, my email is back up. I had to remove it for a week or so for some
personal reasons. Very good poem indeed. Keep up the great poetry.
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- Oldcomer2Lv 57 years ago
Like the cicadas that are going to smother us this spring as they emerge from their 17-year cycle.
- william wLv 67 years ago
Ma--are sure this isn't the economy?-----Anyway, I enjoyed the poem.It's very descriptive, has a nice buildup, and as was already commented, is very eerie(and you know how I feel about those things)---Nice Job------william
- PANDORA ΠανδώραLv 77 years ago
This is frighteningly good.
Very vivid...can almost feel the pain.
- Rayven53Lv 67 years ago
Your write, too, reached its own amazing crescendo with "smothers the blue from your sky"...I am SOOOOOOOO glad you still writin' darlin'! :)
- Marty CLv 47 years ago
- 7 years ago
Or you dare them to caw louder
and stay longer.