will you please comment on this cliched poem?
In the darkest recess I sit
writing poems for you
cliched, yet I can't help it
As winds blow in me
Singing your name
In a cold, sorrowful chorus
- NatLv 77 years agoBest Answer
A great example of what can be
accomplished with 6 lines.
This poem packs a subtle "wallop".
No over-used word or phrase here.
Kudos to you, T.
- 3 years ago
I preferred like to be an amusement park and we're the comedians in it We chortle we cry we act we entertain with a price to make all happy. The hazard we take if any if we shouldn't have a aware coronary heart.
- Hope Leslie ShyLv 77 years ago
I was thinking of writing a poem beginning in a similar way, just a few hours ago, with the word 'darkest' in the first line. I was going to write 'in the darkest corner of the room'.
If I had written this, I would name it 'Loneliness'.
- Caz :) xLv 77 years ago
Himedal , Can I be truthful with you without you thinking I'm being rude ? You no I always read you're Poetry and it's great . ''This one I can't absorb' it's message is confusing me
Does that come as a surprise no not really because I'm easily confused .
Nice to see you're posting, and you're poem speaks warmly to me, very fresh keen and young .
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- PANDORA ΠανδώραLv 77 years ago
It's not only a beautiful fragment, but a very sad one.
I'm glad to see you being inspired, what ever the reason...x
- ?Lv 57 years ago
I found this astonishingly beautiful and universal. I see nothing cliché about it.
- THE BANNIBAL ONELv 77 years ago
nice,thank you for the short poem.
must be a death metal choir.
- 7 years ago
It's not cliched...it's rings true and real.
- Anonymous7 years ago
I found it very confusing, choppy towards the end. Keep posting.