Can you critic this painting?

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This is a digital painting from Egypt portraying a historical timeline. The concept is the bloody collapse of Mubarak's police state in jan 28th 2011 with 800 deaths and the historical democratic change which followed it. Portraying the first democratically elected in Egypt's modern history after centuries of Turkish, British and later Military dictatorships.

Notorious Mubarak's police force were known to use a blue Toyota truck painted in blue, known locally as the "box" and this was the visible mark of Mubarak's police state. This truck was the first thing you will ever see in Mubarak's police state. The woman is actually Egypt wearing an Egyptian flag (Red-White-Black) resembling a whole nation witnessing change. Rivers of blood washed out 60 years of military dictatorships paving the way for a new era.

The painting was done to resemble carefully how local Egyptians look and dress like and their police state visible signature.

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  • MOZ
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    7 years ago
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    This is going to be rough. Brace yourself now.

    "This is a digital painting from Egypt portraying a historical timeline."

    ...WHAT timeline? There is a shape (NOT TRUCK LIKE) with the word "TOYOTA" in white on a dark background, with a man gazing skywards on a blue circular motion background, and a woman who is sweating and crying profusely from joy in the middle, with a strange reflection of her beneath...

    This shows NO passage of time, much less anything "historical."

    "The concept is the bloody collapse of Mubarak's police state in jan 28th 2011 with 800 deaths and the historical democratic change which followed it."

    ...The viewer would have NO CLUE that this is your concept. Two HAPPY people and the word TOYOTA does not convey "collapse," "police state," "800 deaths" (NO deaths for that matter), nor "historical democratic change..." NONE of those things are visibly present here...Zero. Nada.

    "Portraying the first democratically elected in Egypt's modern history after centuries of Turkish, British and later Military dictatorships."

    ...Democratically elected WHAT???? Democratically elected TOYOTA? Happy sweating woman? Rose? Guy on the side???? WHAT!?!

    "Notorious Mubarak's police force were known to use a blue Toyota truck painted in blue, known locally as the "box" and this was the visible mark of Mubarak's police state. This truck was the first thing you will ever see in Mubarak's police state."

    ...BLUE? I don't see a blue truck, I don't think ANYONE sees a blue truck... Maybe reposition that truck sideways, and paint it BLUE... just a small detail, you know...

    It is positioned well, but there is far too much empty space on the left with the poor "sliding tail light" effect. I would also add an armed policeman or two, and move it away from the center a bit.

    "The woman is actually Egypt wearing an Egyptian flag (Red-White-Black) resembling a whole nation witnessing change."

    ...The excessive tears and sweat have to be massively toned down. Also, she is just WAY too cheerful for this concept. Thoughtful? Yes. Benevolently smiling? Yes. Grinning like a jackal with water pouring off her face? NO. You really, REALLY need to totally rework this section.

    ...The Flag colors are horrendous. Your red is NOT red. It is an orange red. Your black is NOT black, it is a dark brown.

    http://farm4.staticflickr.com/3218/2444822869_2b3d...

    This is the most important detail that hurts your entire painting. I would NEVER have thought that the Egyptian Flag with the colors you have used. You ALSO have neglected to paint the identifying CENTER EMBLEM for the Egyptian flag...That just makes it a striped head scarf...

    This is an actual photo of the Egyptian flag. LOOK at the colors.

    "Rivers of blood washed out 60 years of military dictatorships paving the way for a new era."

    ...That red is as badly colored as your flag. Blood is NOT fire engine bright red...And the odd dip in the middle of the painting, then changing to the strange reflection, is very contrived and phony looking. The sweaty woman is already enough trouble, painting a reflection that distorts her face sideways, and TOTALLY eliminates all that sweat and tears in the reflection just compounds a very bad compositional problem.

    ...Who is the man supposed to be, why is he looking up cross-eyed, and why is the background so weird?

    "The painting was done to resemble carefully how local Egyptians look and dress like and their police state visible signature."

    ...AGAIN, WHAT police state? HOW does this illustrate a "signature?" At present, the signature is one of a brown shape labeled "TOYOTA" sliding into a thoroughly delighted sweaty woman, as a man next to her looks the opposite direction while standing in front of a very sparkly blue circle swirl...(No, it does not look like sky, or water, or anything else that would add to your narrative...)

    If your painting reflected half of what your description tells us, it would be pretty good.

    As is, this is just a VERY confusing mish mash of things that do not visibly go together, nor smoothly blend from one into the other.

    You have included almost NOTHING to represent ANYTHING you describe beyond the word TOYOTA, and a woman. There is no "clothing." These people do not even possess shoulders!

    I REALLY do like your concept, which sounds SO powerful and moving. But this painting does nothing to illustrate what you've told us. Sorry.

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  • 4 years ago

    Well first, colour mixing is realy the principal aspect of portray. It allows u to acheive more colors out of the colors u have and alter differnt colors. Texture is sincerely make patterns or applying paint thicker to created a 3D effect. Form can support compose a correct viewpoint. Line has to do extra with drawing media then portray realy. Space i guess the place between two objects

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  • 7 years ago

    The link does not work - the periods are just periods and not replacements for a longer URL - did you copy it from another posting?

    Generally, if a painting needs this much explanation, it has problems.

    and the word is "critique", not critic in this context.

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