Is this poem alright?

I turned it in for a spanish project a couple of days ago and am just wondering of a couple more opinions on it... My dad is fluent in the language, and does it seem to make sense in spanish and/or english? --- Spanish Yo te espero con pasión Añoro por ti con dolor Cada día, la rosa se marchita Robada... show more I turned it in for a spanish project a couple of days ago and am just wondering of a couple more opinions on it... My dad is fluent in the language, and does it seem to make sense in spanish and/or english?

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Spanish

Yo te espero con pasión
Añoro por ti con dolor
Cada día, la rosa se marchita
Robada de su color

En la luz y la oscuridad
Y cuándo la tierra florece
La primavera te excluye
Todavía la rosa muere

Mi amor, lo siento
Invierno empieza
Nieve te cubre
Y esconde tu belleza

Los petalos son arruinados
Por la escarcha despiadada
Y tú, mi rosa preciosa
Te caíste, abandonada

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English

I wait for you with passion
I yearn for you, in pain
Each day, the rose wilts away
All its color drained

In the light and darkness
Springtime passes it by,
And when the earth blooms,
Still, it continues to die

My love, I am sorry
As winter begins,
The snow covers you
And masks the beauty within

The petals are shriveled
By the merciless frost
And you, my precious rose,
You fall, utterly lost
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