Would you like to critique my newest poem dear poetry affiliates?

Ever since being utterly devastated with Puff, learning that magic was not strong enough to stave off separation of best friends by death, I hold back a liitle of myself in each breath. If I capitulate unto a greater love will it evolve, or gather mists , fog the streetlights and dissolve? I see people take... show more Ever since being utterly devastated with Puff,
learning that magic was not strong enough
to stave off separation of best friends by death,
I hold back a liitle of myself in each breath.

If I capitulate unto a greater love will it evolve,
or gather mists , fog the streetlights and dissolve?
I see people take it for granted and let it degrade
chasing illusions that make little dreamers fade.

So starry eyes glaze over, turning hard,
hearts tossed to the rubbish pile, scarred,
get picked up by poets, dreamers, and like souls.
We rekindle flames from barely burning coals.

I hope this fire warms your benumbed spirit;
for this was a call out for you all to hear it.

This was for all of you, you know:https://www.facebook.com/ForgedByFireACo...
Update: Nancy Viva la difference! It is the interesting things that are the differences , what would we do as a bunch of poet-clones? I love the diversity in the book, it is a good way to see the range of artists in this forum and I hope it helps all realize their own dreams. G'nite!
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