Can you please read my poem?

Keeper of The Lone Blast

By Daniel Mapp

By my interior’s troubled swirling,

I casted aside a screeching circlet,

Upon the hailing stair’s deep brink

Before those descended pupils man,

That sends the azure veins to burst,

Upon the route of the tumbling clouds,

When all erects from Winter’s hazel womb.

Thanks guys for the support. I based it off the prince of the air!!! Peace God bless.

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  • 8 years ago
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    By my interior’s troubled swirling,

    I cached inside the whorl, whirling

    I casted aside a screeching circlet,

    I bled to fill the leeching chalice

    Upon the hailing stair’s deep brink

    where below the corpses stink

    Before those descended pupils man,

    The oblate mass rescinded plans

    That sends the azure veins to burst,

    While all at witches' trials cursed

    Upon the route of the tumbling clouds,

    where one woman held her gaze steady, proud

    When all erects from Winter’s hazel womb

    she will return from her wat'ry tomb.

    COLLABORAPHORIA

  • Anonymous
    8 years ago

    Sorry O M but God won't influence my opinion on your piece kid, It was double Dutch to me babes, the last time I wrote something I didn’t understand was after getting through half a bottle of JD’s……Lol

    I casted aside a screeching circlet,

    a small circle, screeching

    a ring, screeching

    a ring-shaped ornament, especially for the head, screeching.

    Didn’t you check the meaning of this word babes?….Lol

  • Thomas
    Lv 7
    8 years ago

    Daniel

    Well bro, the poem is beautiful, but I did not get it all.

    First five lines thought I got you embellishing in a aesthetically

    nice way a bro with an anger issue taking his beanie on his

    head and throwing it at the feet of students at the bottom of

    the stairs, causing you to blow a gasket (blue veins)

    but lost me on the last two.

    Am probably way off here, but it sort of makes sense, you got

    a give me credit for that.

    Congrats

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  • 8 years ago

    As always Daniel, so good to see you posting and this is a fine piece.

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  • Anonymous
    8 years ago

    Triffic.:D

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