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"Dark 'N Strange"- (Lyrical) Verse 1 & Chorus
Ya wonda why I'm filled with so much passion and rage/
But that's what happ'n when ya lessen a man to a cage/
I haven't even unleashed the darkness/
Imagine a soul that's heartless/
Crowley is weak compared to the I beast/
Within me, 'n He I now release/
It in I and we have begun to feast/
*Spit it out*
Shut ya impudent mouth n listen/
Time ta quit ya fu**in' insolent dissin'/
Check me out I'm hookless/
Reckless/
You follow the text n I'm bookless/
Check this/
Determination look me in my Eyes/
Ya gunna stay in tha gutta, mutha fu**a, just to watch me rise/
RA!/
I am incomparable/
Can't match me, I'm too lyrical/
I am an assassin/
*Breath deep*
I am the heir, with anthrax-in/
How I see it, You nuttin' but fails/
You in a row boat bi***, n my sh**s got sails/
Ya call me crazy/
Ya vision is hazy/
And ya thinkin is lazy/
What I know would make ya a sage see/
I'm filled with these higher optics/
Shouldn't need a telescope ta spot this/
but you do
What/
Hoss is Down, Livin life like love/
'N neva givin' a fu**/
I Come here to shut ya ta He** up/
------------Chorus-----------
Duranged/
It's Dark n Strange/
You askin', "What am I"/
Darkness Fire burnin' opaque, I neva Die/
Strange Set by Ra, Look to tha Sky/
Nothin' weirder than I/
So Dark N Strange
I Am, Cryptic Poetic Hark outta Range/
Who is, Dark n Strange/
Ya frightened of tha commin' age/
Ya too tormented by change/
IT'S NOW
Needa label me "I Am" - The Omnipotent is Dark n Strange!
PLEASE: Keep the Critiquing Positive with Advice if you don't like it!
3 Answers
- 7 years agoFavorite Answer
Damn good...'tis really thrilling...I can feel that exhileration inside me...
Great work!
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- 3 years ago
each music has a round movement or some thing involving the ultimately make it greater by way of first, spelling effectively.. :P jk by way of giving it a intent, feel: to whom or what sort of character might i commit this to? then within the music ship them the message. feel of what factor u are looking to get throughout and so they can support the melody to ur music. along side the rhythm. :] i find it irresistible, however do not precisely understand in which ur attending to except the truth that if u get there, ull get there. speak approximately what u might do if u did get there, and say, sick get there as soon as i am getting there. :] provide extra intent to ur music :] however it's well to be critizised. no longer by way of just one character or factor thou. many critics critisize for the satisfactory. thats how u become aware of precisely what u are or what u are growing and if u wish, get greater. wish i helped :]
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- 7 years ago
Different that is for sure! It intrigues me, gets me thinking, I like it!
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