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"Dark 'N Strange"- (Lyrical) Verse 1 & Chorus Ya wonda why I'm filled with so much passion and rage/ But that's what happ'n when ya lessen a man to a cage/ I haven't even unleashed the darkness/ Imagine a soul that's heartless/ Crowley is weak compared to the I... show more "Dark 'N Strange"- (Lyrical) Verse 1 & Chorus

Ya wonda why I'm filled with so much passion and rage/
But that's what happ'n when ya lessen a man to a cage/
I haven't even unleashed the darkness/
Imagine a soul that's heartless/
Crowley is weak compared to the I beast/
Within me, 'n He I now release/
It in I and we have begun to feast/
*Spit it out*
Shut ya impudent mouth n listen/
Time ta quit ya fu**in' insolent dissin'/
Check me out I'm hookless/
Reckless/
You follow the text n I'm bookless/
Check this/
Determination look me in my Eyes/
Ya gunna stay in tha gutta, mutha fu**a, just to watch me rise/
RA!/
I am incomparable/
Can't match me, I'm too lyrical/
I am an assassin/
*Breath deep*
I am the heir, with anthrax-in/
How I see it, You nuttin' but fails/
You in a row boat bi***, n my sh**s got sails/
Ya call me crazy/
Ya vision is hazy/
And ya thinkin is lazy/
What I know would make ya a sage see/
I'm filled with these higher optics/
Shouldn't need a telescope ta spot this/
but you do
What/
Hoss is Down, Livin life like love/
'N neva givin' a fu**/
I Come here to shut ya ta He** up/
------------Chorus-----------
Duranged/
It's Dark n Strange/
You askin', "What am I"/
Darkness Fire burnin' opaque, I neva Die/
Strange Set by Ra, Look to tha Sky/
Nothin' weirder than I/
So Dark N Strange
I Am, Cryptic Poetic Hark outta Range/
Who is, Dark n Strange/
Ya frightened of tha commin' age/
Ya too tormented by change/
IT'S NOW
Needa label me "I Am" - The Omnipotent is Dark n Strange!


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