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Anonymous asked in 社會及文化語言 · 8 years ago

correct my gramma mistakes

Rough draft Essay-Volcano Have you heard about our world has two different points of energy? One is Volcano, another one is Solar System. As many people know that a volcano is an opening or eruption, in a planet’s surface or crust, which allow moltern rock, ash , and gases to escape from below the surface. Volcano activity is involved the extrusion of rock tends to mountain over a long period of time. The important reason for volcanic eruption is about their original place and why they will appear in different mountain and what damage they can do for environment. Volcano is a mountain with a large opening at the top through which ash clouds and the hot liquid rocks are onto the area from inside the earth. For example: There are volcano is name ‘vesuvio’, this volcano erupted in the past in 79 AD, and this is a kind of stratovolcano in Italy. Lastly, I think that a major volcano eruption has a dangerous effect to cover the top of the earth. Actually, volcanoes are as well as dangerous when they erupt; the magma is started in forming by the crust of volcano. There are the most common types we can see in different volcano, shield volcanoes, stratovolcanoes, and Cinder cones. The volcano always moving around the earth, I think because the volcanoes grew, forming other islands and little mountain, the volcano still move and that caused the volcano to waken again.

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    8 years ago
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    有太多句法錯寫,不單單是文法修正,可參考以下寫法(有些看不明你的意思,只能大意重寫相關的內容)

    Do you know that there are two different source of energy on this planet? One obvious one is the Solar system, another is a Volcano. As many people know that a volcano is an opening or eruption on the plant’s surface or crust, where molten rock, ash, and gases [] escape from below the surface. Volcanic activity involves the extrusion of rock deep inside mountains over a long period of time. The importance of volcanic eruption lies in its geological location related to different mountains and the damage it can do to the environment. A volcano is a mountain with a large opening at the top where hot liquid rocks and ash clouds eject from inside the earth. For example, there is a volcano named “Vesuvio”, it erupted in AD79, and it is a kind of stratovolcano in Italy. I think a major volcano eruption has dangerous effect to everything on the surface of the earth. [這句不是lastly亦跟前後文未有連繫,可改放在另一位置寫作危害內容的開頭] The magma forms the crust of the volcano after the eruption. The most common types of volcano we see are shield volcanoes, stratovolcanoes and cinder cones. Volcanic activities move around the earth regularly. Many active volcanoes grow to form islands and small mountains that seem to be waken from time to time.

  • 8 years ago

    How can it be the same:-(1)eruption(2)79 AD vesuvio,Pompei,(3)magma moves waken.

  • 8 years ago

    我覺得你篇野有少少野錯左..volcano is an opening or eruption想指咩

    同埋你知唔知個結構係點?? core>mantle>crust>surface

    below surface=crust

    crust of volcano???火山的地殼??

    其實你用簡單句子就得,唔駛特登寫到咁複雜

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