恩賢 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 8 years ago

急! 請大師幫我修改這篇故事

如題,因為我明天要跟教會的人講一則英文故事

以下全部由本人自己編輯,請勿抄襲

也請各位大師幫我抓出拼字,文法的錯誤

並告訴我如果要以'故事'來呈現 這時候應該用什麼語氣

或者是可以加哪些能引觀眾吸引力的問句或笑話

以及演講的一些技巧

(我該做什麼動作等 語調我OK 不過動作還有文章的停留等)

Good afternoon, Ladies and Gentlemen. Today, I'm going to tell you a story about Jesus' 比喻(P開頭的 請各位大大幫忙查一下)

Once upon a time, Jesus told a story by a lake, and there were lots of people came and listen to it. Jesus said: One day, a farmer was planting some crops. The seeds were thrown by many places. The first kind of seed is the seed that were thrown on the 田埂(這字不會,請大大指點). When the bird sees it, the birds quickly grabbed them and ate it.

The second kind of seed were thrown on the solid stones. At first, they grown well and budded. But when the sun rises, they die.

The third kind of seeds were seeds that be thrown on the thorns. The thorns stole their nutrient and they grown up unhealthily, so they cannot yield/harvest(請大大交我哪個比較好?)

Finally, the seed that thrown on the good soil have harvest a lot. Not only double, triple, even 60 times of the 1! (這段怪怪的 意思是說 結出來的果子不只是原來的2倍 3倍 ,而是原來的 10被 20被 甚至60被!)

After Jesus said the story, some people came to ask Jesus: Why did you say this story?

Jesus said: The 1st kind of seed was like the people who didn't trust me, and Satan came and grabbed them away. The 2nd kind of seed which grown on the stone is like the people who trusted me first, but he met with misfortune, and he goes away. The 3rd kind of seed is like the people who was confused by the money and other people, so he didn't trusted me after. The last kind of seed is the person who followed me even if there's something difficult.

Ladies and Gentlemen, what kind of seed were you?

聖經上的:

v. 1 當那一天,就是被法利賽人汙衊祂是靠鬼王趕鬼的那一天(12: 24)。

v. 3 當時耶穌很可能以湖邊的船為講台,面對著海岸附近的田地,有農夫正在撒種,於是耶穌就藉著大家都看得見的撒種人作為教材。巴勒斯坦都是旱田,旱田的田埂只需有走路的小徑即可,因此巴勒斯坦的土地都是劃分成狹長的條形。猶太人有兩種撒種方式:

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Update:

1. 撒種人邊走邊撒,當風吹時種子有時會落到路旁。

2. 在驢的臀部上放兩個裝著種子的大布袋。驢子走到田裡,打開布袋底的袋口,穀子就會落出來。農夫趕著驢子,當驢子走動的時候,穀子也就跟著撒在田地裡。驢子走到田邊時,因臀部搖擺,就會將種子撒到道路旁。道路是農夫走的路,種子在道路上生長,會因為農夫或驢子走過而踩死 (Barclay, William, 馬太福音註釋,網路版)。

Update 2:

灑出去的種子有四種下場,表示四種人接受福音的程度不等:

土地的種類 撒種的結果解釋

v. 4 路旁 飛鳥吃盡了v19 聽道不明白的,那惡者來把撒在心裏的奪去了

vv. 5-6

石頭地 日頭一曬就枯乾了 v20-21 聽道當下歡喜領受,只因心裏沒有根,不過是暫時的,及至為道遭患難,就立刻跌倒了

v. 7

荊棘裏荊棘長起把種子擠住了v22 聽道後來有世上的思慮,錢財迷惑把道擠住了,不能結實

v. 8 好土 結實有100倍,60倍的,30倍v23 聽道明白了,後來結實很多倍

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  • 8 years ago
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    很抱歉,因時間與專長的關係,只能做到修改文章。

    Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. today, I'm going to tell you a story about Jesus' parable.Once upon a time, Jesus told was telling a story by a lake, and there were lots of people came and listen to it. Jesus said: One day, a farmer was planting some crops, he throw The seeds were thrown by to many places. The first kind of seeds is the seed that which were thrown on to the banks of fields. When and the birds sees it grabbed and ate them , the birds quickly grabbed them and ate it. as soon as they saw them.

    The second kind of seeds were thrown on the solid stones. At first the beginning, they budded and grown well and budded. But when the sun rises had risen, they would die.

    The third kind of seeds were seeds that those which be were thrown on into the thorns. The thorns stole absorbed their nutrient and they made them grown( make 是使役動詞,其後動詞須是原形)up unhealthily, so they cannot yielded poorly and can’t be harvested.

    Finally Luckly, the seeds that were thrown on the good soil had harvest yielded a lot. Not only double or triple times of the quantity that was expected originally, but even 60 times of the 1 that! After Jesus said the story, some people came to ask Jesus: Why did do you say this story?(完全引述1個人的話,為直接引述,須用現在式,就像那人在講話,間接引述則使用過去式,you改為he,即以第三者立場來引述別人的話,Why did he say this story?)Jesus said: The first kind of seeds was were like the people who didn't trust me, and so Satan came and grabbed them away. The second kind of seeds which grew (過去式應用過去式動詞,非過去分詞)on the stone is were like the people who trusted me first, but he they met with misfortunes later, and he goes then passed away. The third kind of seeds is were like the people who was were confused by the money and or other people, so he they didn't trusted ( 前已有副詞didn’t)me after as a result, lost themselves gradually, and the last kind of seeds is were the person who followed me even if there's they met something difficult.

    2012-06-27 22:06:56 補充:

    文章最後一句

    Now, ladies and gentlemen, Let us think what kind of seeds we are?

    2012-06-28 17:46:25 補充:

    對不起,主動式之throw 必須改為threw,使用過去式。

    2012-06-29 00:17:52 補充:

    很對不起,我改得不䝭細心

    lots of people came and listen to it.

    learn應加ed

    luckly 請修正為 luckily

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  • GOGO
    Lv 5
    8 years ago

    基督信仰的教義是──

    上帝差派耶穌為世人的救主,只要悔改接受祂,罪就能被赦免,得到永生,詳解如下:

    由於人類犯罪,就讓「罪」進入這個世界,世間也就出現死亡疾病煩惱,而上帝藉耶穌要讓世人與祂「和好」,重新建立「美好的關係」(這美好的關係原本被「罪」所破壞)。上帝造世人原意要我們與祂同在,並要受託去管理受造的世界,人原本是有權柄與榮耀,但因「罪」而失去,於是藉著耶穌基督而被挽回、過犯被赦免、重新恢復尊貴身份,將來與上帝一同管理新天新地,那是一個永恆福樂的新宇宙,公義和平永居其中,不再有痛苦、災難、死亡、老化與悲傷。

    2012-06-26 22:20:31 補充:

    您好喔^^

    拜拜真得有那麼好嗎?事實證明燒香和燒金紙都會燒出致癌物質

    而且許多拜拜用具都有釀造火災的危險

    證據:

    http://forum.1ch.hk/gogo/viewthread.php?tid=148

    得癌症的人在末期時是身體彷彿被刀子不斷割裂,一天連割二十四小時,接連數天才過世的

    而且地球暖化日益嚴重,不要再拜拜了,燒一次金紙,不曉得要砍掉多少顆樹,加劇暖化效應,颱風會越來越恐怖的,許多陸地正被海水淹沒,北極熊快要沒有家了

    我相信禱告比拜拜更好^^

    2012-06-26 22:20:41 補充:

    延伸閱讀:

    要拜神,就拜「造物主」(上帝),不要拜「受造者」

    http://forum.1ch.hk/gogo/viewthread.php?tid=8511

    拜拜與祭祖問題通常是一般東方人要信耶穌時會遇到的難題,以下有29篇文章希望能幫助你處理這樣的困擾^^

    http://forum.1ch.hk/gogo/viewthread.php?tid=62

    基督徒雖不祭祖但有「記」祖,雖不上香但有追思活動,基督徒講求的是「敬祖」,而不是膜拜祖先

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