What do you think of my prologue? 10 points?

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I'd really like some feedback on my writing, as it is my first time writing a proper story in chapter form. Thanks in advance :) 10 points.
Update: I posted it again due to the lack of response previously, its important to gain as much feedback as possible when writing?
Also, to advertise my wattpad account, which I have just made.
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