please answers.what do you think of my lyrics?

here are the lyrics i wrote: it's about not wanting to be too attached to someone because they are going aWAY

You're not the typical person people meet usually

You make my saddest of days feel like nothing is wrong and dead

I wanna stay away from you now because the days will not seem the same

But everytime i see that smile on your face, it seems like you're the only person i have

I know oh it's so sad, the only wish i have

oh why do the flowers go down everytime that i walk through your garden?

I try not to get so attached but everytime i see you i go back

go back to being really attached

why do you have to go?

[ chorus]

And everything that i knew

is going the same direction as you

why do you keep helping my mistakes

you awlays do whatever it takes

i don't want to see you go away

it ends up ruining my whole day

maybe there will be another day with you

Farewell to the happiest moments that make the broken pieces fit

oh why are you really perfect, the only one that lights up my day

even when i try to stay away because you're leaving in some days

break the chains that keep us together

i don't want to be closer and closer

I try not to get so attached but everytime i see you i go back

go back to being really attached

why do you have to go

[repeat chorus]

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  • 9 years ago
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    Not bad. The lyrics seem a little choppy but I also don't know what kind of beat you're putting this to so it might fit to whatever you have planned. I edited your song a little to how I would've wrote it but in the end it's your music not mine.

    You're not the typical person people meet usually

    You make my saddest of days feel okay

    I want to stay away from you now because the days won’t seem the same

    I’m not sure what is to blame

    But every time i see that smile on your face,

    And every time I’m caught in this place

    It seems like you're the only person i have

    I know, oh, it's so sad, the only wish i have

    Oh, why do the flowers go down whenever i walk through your garden?

    I try not to get so attached until I see you again

    Why do you have to go?

    [Chorus]

    And everything that I knew

    Is going the same direction as you

    Why do you keep helping my mistakes?

    You always do whatever it takes

    I don't want to see you go away

    It ends up ruining my whole day

    Maybe there will be another day with you

    Farewell to the happiest moments that make the broken pieces fit

    Oh, why are you really perfect? You’re the only one who makes my life fully lit

    I try to stay away because of the way you leave some days

    Break the chains that keep us together

    I don't want to be closer because we can’t be forever

    I try not to get so attached but every time I see you I go back

    Go back to being really attached

    Why do you have to go?

    [Repeat chorus]

    Hope I was helpful

  • 4 years ago

    uh... Be True to Your School - Beach Boys (simply kidding) I just like the Springstein line "have a bit religion, there is magic within the night time, you ain't no cosmetic however whats up, you are all right' Crosby Stills Nash & Young- Rejoice, have fun, we haven't any option, however to bring on. (love the irony of that line) "Light up, each person, become a member of us on this occasion, Light up and be comfortable, candy candy sounds will fill the air" through( any person recognise? ) And in my middle of the night, there may be nonetheless a gentle that shines on me, shine till the next day to come, Let it Be. Beatles Keep on Truckin, Mama, truck my blues away Grateful Dead You are not looking for a weathervane to understand which manner the wind blows Bob Dylan Take this Job and Shove it, I Ain't Working Here No More- Johnny Paycheck Hey, you, in the market within the bloodless, getting lonely, getting historic, are you able to pay attention me? Pink Floyd And it rather does not topic if I'm improper or correct, wherein I belong, I'm correct, wherein I belong... (which can be learn as - wherein I belong, I'm correct wherein I belong) Beatles

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