K. I'm gonna write a song on the spot right now!?

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Okay maybe this will be a little dark as most my songs are :)

Okay Leggo!

"this feeling is so surreal, 

Knowing im the reason shes gone

I was sitting at the table, where she  had her last meal 

But I'm okay with that.

You've heard the stories and the rumors

It's all true

But there was nothing I could do, 

She pulled the trigger

I just sat there and stared.

Her blood was thrown across the room

My gun still in her hand

A note, next to a flower in bloom

Telling me I'm the reason she's gone

She rolled the dice, and it killed her

My love was not enough for her

She needed to have it all

Was it really my fault ?

I didn't mean to make her sad

I only meant to show her I cared

I didn't mean to make her end it all,

Was it really my fault that shes gone?

Maybe she should of killed me

Before the final dance 

Knife in the back, cut throat 

Instantly know I'm gone

Better you than me she says

As my body falls down to the floor

Out of her  hands and into the ground

As I lay dying, the devil herself leans in

And whispers

You shouldve killed me when you had the chance.

Update:

Couple of quick changes to the last verse to make it flow better

Was it really my fault that shes gone?

Maybe she shouldve killed me

Before the final dance 

Knife in the back, set me free 

Instantly know I'm gone

Better you than me she says

As the blade in my back is torn 

my body falls down to the floor

Out of her  hands, the never felt warm?

As I lay dying, the devil herself leans in,

Mentions that one thing.

You shouldve killed me when you had the chance.

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Simply beautiful, lovely little ballad. The lady you wrote this for is lucky indeed.