小鍾 asked in 教育與參考考試 · 9 years ago

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My Special Experience Y-10 48 Gilbert What do you do when you lose a way and hurt your body on the same time ?My name is Gilbert. Today I will tell you about first time I went to the farm, first time I lose the way and first time I stitched on my body. First, I will tell you first time I went to the farm. I love animals when I was a child, so my parent and I went to the farm in holiday when I was third grades. There has a lot of kind animals in the farm. I was going crazy at there. Next, I will tell you first time I lose the way. When I was played in the farm with animals, my parent said that they will go to find the restaurant now but I did not heard what they said. When I look back there was no people at here I was really scared and I run every where. Finally, I will talk about first time I stitched on my body. When I was run like a crazy, suddenly I fall down on the flight of the stairs. And I was in a coma. When I was wake I was in the hospital. And I have a three stitched on my left eye brow! I hope you have enjoyed listening to my speech. Now you know all about first time I went to the farm, first time I lose the way and first time I stitched on my body. If you did not you can hit your eye brow by yourself. Thanks for your listening.

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  • 9 years ago
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    My Special Experience Y-10 48 Gilbert What would you do when you getlost and hurt yourself at the same time? I am Albert, and I would like to sharemy experience about my special trip to a farm.I love animals. When I was ingrade three, my parents took me to a farm. There were so many animals. I went crazybecause of the lovely animals. It was my first time to touch animals, and I would always remember. As I was played happily withanimals, my parents went away to find a restaurant. They did tell me when theyleft, but I was so excited that I didn't hear it. After a while, I looked for them and foundno one. I was so scared that I ran to find them. Suddenly, I fell on a flight ofstairs and passed out. When I woke up, I was in a hospital. They told me thatmy left eye brow got hurt and the doctor stitched on it. My first trip to a farm began with joy butended up in a hospital. It was a very special experience to me. Thank you forlistening and hope you enjoy my story.

    2012-05-15 18:05:32 補充:

    字連在一起,很抱歉

    第一行getlost 是get lost

    第二行 sharemy 是share my

    五crazy because

    八 with animals

    九they left

    十found no one

    十二 of stairs

    十三 that my

    十五but ended up

    十六 for listening

  • 9 years ago

    哈哈~把學校作業拿來PO~~~~

    很聰明+humble嘛~

    幫你改:

    My Special Experience Y-10 48 Gilbert What do you do when you lose a way and hurt your body on the same time ?My name is Gilbert. Today I will tell you about first time I went to the farm, first time I lose the way and first time I stitched on my body.First, I will tell you first time I went to the farm. I love animals when I was a child, so my parent and I went to the farm in holiday when I was third grades. There has a lot of kind animals in the farm. I was going crazy at there. Next, I will tell you first time I lose the way. When I was played in the farm with animals, my parent said that they will goes to find the restaurant now but I did not heard what they said. When I look book there was no people at here I was really scared and I run every where. Finally, I will talk about first time I stitched on my bady. When I was run like a crazy, suddenly I fall down on the flyt of the stars. And I was in a coma. When I was wake I as in the hospital. And I have a three stitched on my left eye blow!I hope you have enjoyed listening to my speech. Now you know all about first time I went to the flame, first time I loose the way and first time I stitched on my body. If you did not you can hit your eye blow by yourself. Thanks for your listening.

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