ariel s asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

This is a poem I wrote called The Blaze(redo).How it it?

Tyrannical blaze under pelting rain

Misery fed by crystal heart

The soul torn between forgiveness,betrayal

Brazen script under hushed breath

Enters ears with acute brutality

And the raging blaze erupts in laughter

As the sorrow fuels it for more

Jolly lips crisped, incinerated,

Heart sunken to a grotesque shape

Hollow eyes, blinded by deception

Each breathe, a step towards death

Every step towards death, an escape into focus

And the blaze suffocates each breath

Into a toxin, overcome by all oppression

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  • 9 years ago
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    Content good, but I would work on the presentation

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