Is this sentence OK for the start of my story? Its a bit unusual.?
‘Odysseus,’ I heard Circe call through the darkness, ‘Odysseus where hell are you?’
‘I don’t know, come towards my voice.’
I listened to Circe’s gentle steps come my way and then put my hands out in front of me.
‘I still can’t find-‘
‘Ah, you just hit me in the eye.’
‘Well don’t put your eye where my hand is then.’
She gripped my arm and then held it tightly for a moment.
‘What happened to us?’
‘I’ll tell you what just happened to us, that bloody idiot sent us to the world our worst enemy created!’
‘Don’t call him that.’
‘Well it not like he going to-‘
I jumped as her grip tightened on my arm and then held her to my chest.
‘What about them?’
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