Anonymous
Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

Rate My Short Poem(: Please?

If anyones wondering, I'm 14. Enjoy haha(:

Monster:

Always so happy

In the eyes of a friend

Yet she holds in some things

They'd never comprehend

Bringing laughter to others

With a heart that seems pure

But they'd never even guess

She was so insecure

And as her worst enemy

Rears its ugly head

The monster in the mirror

Causes more tears to be shed

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  • Aaron
    Lv 7
    9 years ago
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    Considering you're young this is a nice poem. It flows well and the rhymes aren't just placed because they rhyme. It seems well thought out. I don't think this poems needs it but as you get older you should look at a thesaurus to bump up your vocabulary and get some really interesting poetry flowing :)

  • I think most teens experience this; I know I did! (I still do...every morning I look in the mirror and wonder who that old man is!)

    The third stanza could flow better, but I truly enjoy the meaning behind it.

    All in all, a nice work. Thank you for sharing with us.

  • 9 years ago

    Like all but the end. End seems a bit choppy, but otherwise a great job!

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    very very good i like it.... i would probably give about 8 out of 10!! x

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  • Pretty nifty, you've got talent! ^___^

  • 9 years ago

    its good! :-)

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