急求~~請問誰可幫我找出我寫的文章結構哪裡有錯少了些什麼嗎?

USA TODAY Snapshots:How do you plan to shop for the holidays?According toinvestigate result in USA TODAY 2011. When people shop for the holidays, the most people shop in store. It is sixty four percent. The second list is thirty percent online and justsix percent in catalog. Why most people choose in store? I suppose who want to shopping,relaxing period and more safe than online. Older people preference is for famousbrand and they rarely to use computer. The stores are various famous brandsmore safe than online. The thirty percent choose online. Forthe work in holiday, they haven’t much time to shopping who only bought online.In the recently, Internet more and more rapid development, people frequentlyuse that. The result record:” Poll reveals that nearly two-thirds will use the internet to scout outgood deals before buying.” It cause of the higher than catalog. Catalog is mostinfrequently using because it is inconvenience and the quality is the worst. Iconsider the Snapshots very exact.If I am a choice, I also choice store,because the clothes or shoes are good quality at bargain price in store.Whenever stores encounter holiday s, they have more type of choice. I veryfrequently shop in holidays.

百分比是正確的~誰可以幫我看句子結構有哪些不順結構不對,非常感謝~~

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    According to the investigation result in USA TODAY 2011. When people shop for the holidays, people who shop in store accounts sixty-four percent. Thirty is online and just six percent shops in catalog. Why most people choose to shop in store? I suppose, people who want to shop, relax and is safer than online. Older people prefer famous brand and they rarely use computer. The stores have various famous brands and are safer than online.

    The thirty percent chooses to shop online is due to their work. In holiday season, they don't get that much time to shop and will only buy online. Recently, Internet commerce has progressed more and more rapidly. The poll record reveals that nearly two-thirds will use the internet to scout out good deals before buying. Catalog shopping is most infrequently used because it is inconvenient and the quality is the worst. I consider this snapshot is very accurate.If I have a choice, I will also choose stores, because the clothes or shoes are in a better quality at a bargain price in store. Around holidays, stores will have more choices. I often shop around holidays.

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