Is this sentence correct?

This is for my essay and I want a good grade on it.

There were three prominent activists who stood out who were, William Lloyd Garrison, James Gillespie Birney, and Frederick Douglass.

is it ok to use who two times in the same sentence?

Can you please help by pointing out the errors for me? Thanks :)

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  • 8 years ago
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    Condense this down to:

    Three prominent activists were William Lloyd Garrison, James Gillespie Birney, and Frederick Douglass.

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  • 8 years ago

    There were three outstanding prominent activists, William Lloyd Garrison, James Gillespie Birney and Frederick Douglass. It sounds grammatically better without the two who's! :) (by including the word outstanding, which replaces stood out, also eliminates words that aren't necessary in the sentence!

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  • Anonymous
    8 years ago

    Its ok but it would sound better if you said.....

    the three prominent activist who stood out werre, william lloyd garrison, james gillespie birney, and frederick douglas.

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