Even though the main character of this article i read is nearly a hundred years old, her spirit to study wholeheartedly despite her age inspired me. Similar to us in the present, seniors can be seen in classes and schools, all for the purpose of getting educated or to fulfill their dreams despite of their locations of living, which may be located in Nantou, Hsinchu, Zhanghua...and other remote places. I admired their ambitions to learn.
I am a mature lady of 30 with a degree of only college of technology. It has been my dream to acquire a bachelor degree, so that is the reason i'm here in Zhanghua: to study my favorite subject, English. I will not give up. I will definitely become proficient at master it.
I am also very pleased to make friends with some like-minded people.
I saw this article lead nearly hundred years old, although her body was gradually old, but (although 後面不能加but) she wanted to study wholeheartedly the spirit lets me admire(lets me admire改成inspire me). It is similar to present's we(present's we 改成 us in the present). In our class also has a senior schoolmate,(schoolmate 加 -s) they want to complete the education or the dream come here to study;(用;來連接independent 句子) some students are also very far away from Nantou, Hsinchu, Zhanghua…and other places come to attend class, I admire (add object) equally.I was(你現在是還是以前是? use "am") thirty years old and a young successful fashion(fashion=流行) lady with a degree of just college of technology. I've always wanted to complete bachelor's degree, therefore I arrived here from Zhanghua to study and read the subject which I liked: English. I certainly must(certainly must 改成 will do my best to) learn it, and I won’t(=will not) give up. (give up就可以了) I am also very pleased to make friends with some like-minded people.
加油啦!! 學英文的重點就是閱讀，讀越多，英文就越好喔 ;)