Is my story good idea or bad? Please answer...?!?

1. What should i change about it and what should i keep?

2. Which of the Title do you like best (down below where it says Title)

3. What type of villain should there be (like if it human, demon, angel, robot, half of something, etc. - you chose) and what should (female or male - you chose) And please name him/her?

4.Should i keep this or have a different idea?

Black Angel, Mirror, Moonless, Half-blood, Star Light Dark Night,Through the Looking Glass, Caged, (Tell me if you have anymore ideas please (Title))

By K. M. Robin (My Pen Name)

Everyone has another soul inside of them called Kuras and that is their true selves. But when the Kuras takes control, the person you know today will be lost. Moriko is a half-breed demon and hunt's down these Kuras with her friends who are twins - Yuki (a wolf demon) and Hunter (a cat demon) who are also full-breed demons. Kyuu (a nine-tailed fox demon) who's Yuki's, Hunter's and Moriko's master and adoptive father, tells them all something that sends Moriko to runaway from home.

Then when attacked by a Kura, two shady characters who calls themselves Arcices and Darkrie saves her enters the picture. They say that they're Moriko's other self. Moriko doesn't know what to do with people who live in her soul and she can't do a dam thing about it. But when an ancient evil awakens, Moriko's memories from seven years ago that were missing start reappearing all of a sudden. No one will tell her anything and Moriko wants to know what and who they are. Who are the enemies and who are the allies? Moriko doesn't know who to believe. What's a girl with wings and a violin spouse to do??

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  • 8 years ago
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    Of the titles, they are all okay except Through the Looking Glass. That's already a classic book by Lewis Carroll. The plot itself is a little confusing at the minute, but it's interesting. First if the Kuras are the person's true soul, wouldn't they know about it? From the description it sounds like that's the evil side so I'm not sure if that's what you wanted. What happens to a person when they're taken over? I'm not sure how the soul could attack anybody, so you'd have to think of a reason for that (which could be a lot of fun to write). The ideas sound interesting, so it's up to you to keep it or not. Sounds like a good start that just needs a little more developing, so create your own world and have fun! Good luck, sounds like it might even make a cool manga.

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