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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 9 years ago

英文日記修改 (急!!!!!!)

因為老師規定交一篇日記所以我打了一篇

不過希望各位可以幫我修正錯誤或補充

真的謝謝!!!!

Last friday,I didn't feel very well in lunch time,but I didn't care about this symptom.

When close to nap time,I was felt dizzy and naueous.I felt terrible,and I wasworried about afteroom courses were affected by the situation.

A few miuntes later,I thought Imight have medicine in my schooibag.looking for a long time and searched for surrounding,however,I couldn't find my thing though I've looked everywhere.

I was so disappointed at that time,I gradually felt tired,chilled in the air,and exhausted.

slowly fall asleep until school bell.although still felt light-headed,nevertheless,I was not feit nauseated ,fatigued and chilled yet.

Luckily,an hour later I getting better and better,I didn't need to cross my finger and felt terrible.

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  • 9 years ago
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    Last friday,I didn't feel very well in lunch time,

    Friday 要大寫,lunch time 前面加 "at"

    Last Friday, I didn't feel very well at lunch time,

    but I didn't care about this symptom.

    When close to nap time,

    你是要指"接近午休時間嗎?"如過果市的話,用 "it was about nap time"或" it was closed to nap time"

    When it was about nap time,/ When it was closed to nap time

    I was felt dizzy and naueous.

    "naueous"一般是指"令人作嘔的",如過你要說"自己想吐",用" felt sick"或 "felt ill"就好了。還有felt 是動詞,前面不用加"was"

    I felt dizzy and sick.

    I felt terrible,and I wasworried about afteroom courses were affected by the situation.

    用"the courses this afternoon"會比較好。然後因為你是"擔心會影響到",所以我們用假設語氣好不好?你看看如何~

    I felt terrible, and I was worried about the courses this afternoon would be affected by the situation.

    A few miuntes later,I thought Imight have medicine in my schooibag.

    小問題你應該只是打錯,就是單字間的空格和"school bag "

    looking for a long time and searched for surrounding,

    主詞不見了而且時態不一樣,最後也改了一點點

    I looked for it and searched around the surrounding for a long time,

    however,I couldn't find my thing though I've looked everywhere.

    把"looked"改成"checked"不要一直重複一個字。

    I was so disappointed at that time,I gradually felt tired,chilled in the air,and exhausted.

    感覺勞累~所以用"felt exhausted "

    slowly fall asleep until school bell.

    不完整喔~主詞不見而且學校的鈴聲怎樣?我自己幫你加喔~

    I fell in asleep slowy until the shcool bell rang.

    although still felt light-headed,nevertheless,I was not feit nauseated ,fatigued and chilled yet.

    嗯...我直接幫你改,看不懂再問我

    Altough I still felt light-headed, and yer I didn't feel sick, chilled and fatigued anymore.

    Luckily,an hour later I getting better and better,

    到過來比較好,還有,你要用" I was getting" or " I got"

    I got better and better an hour later.

    I didn't need to cross my finger and felt terrible.

    就這樣啦~打了好久,希望有幫到你!

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  • 9 years ago

    Last Friday, I didn't feel well in lunch time but not pay attention to

    the symptoms.

    Until the nap time I was feeling dizzy and nauseous, it is terrible and made

    me to worry about how to go to class in the afternoon.

    A few minutes later, I through it might be medicine in the schoolbag.

    Unfortunately, it was nothing after looking for anywhere possible.

    And than I was began to feel tired, cold, exhausted and than fall for sleeping

    until the school bell weak me up.

    Still I felt light-headed but was no more feel of nauseated, fatigued and cold.

    Luckily, I was feeling better and better in hour later and feeling well.

    (Cross finger 通常是"祝福別人" 不太用在自己)

    Source(s): ME
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