小鬼 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 9 years ago

請幫幫我~不知道這"英文文章"O不OK

John always takes subway to go to his university.

But, one day his classmate Lucy invite him to take his motorcycle.

John says don't , because he thinks that the motorcycle is very dangerous.

Lucy tells him, she is a good driver, she wants to school only for ten minutes.

Lucy has never waited for him to answer and then decide together .

Behind , John jumps on the motorcycle of Lucy.

He rode is very rapid

On the street, she rides exceeded other taxis of the motorcycles, cars.

Lucy not only ride very fast , and still ride in the sidewalk, also approach stranger very much.

She makes a turn to street one NTU bus ran into beside and fast.

(She turns onto the street and a big bus nearly runs into them.)

When they arrive a school.

John jumps down a motorcycle.

The Lucy wants to invite him to release from school to take her motorcycle ,but John is veryfrightened , he can't talk.

Contrary of he just shakes head to indicate don't

英文文章 幫我看看文法有沒有錯

還有幫我看看 黃色部分的字有無其其他替代的單字

粉紅色部分,那兩句意思是否一樣,如果不一樣,能否給我一句一樣的句子!

and可否幫我稍微修改一下句子,讓她比較順暢點!!

謝謝:)

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  • 9 years ago
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    takes subway 改成 takes the subway.

    Lucy invite him to take his motorcycle.

    改成 Lucy offers him a ride on her scooters.

    good driver改成 great driver.

    she wants to ...........改成 Lucy tells...........great driver, and that it only takes ten minutes to get to school.

    Lucy has.............改成 Lucy won't take no for an answer so John decides to go with her.

    Behide那整句改成 after john jumps on lucy's scooter,she takes off very quockly.

    On the street 那整句改成She drives a lot faster than the other scooters, cars, and taxis.Not only does Lucy drive fast but she also drives on the sidewalk and nearly hits a pedestrian! 粉紅色那個部份我改成 Then she turns back onto the street and a big bus nearly runs into them.Arrive 改成 get to school.John jumps down a motorcycle. 改成John jumps off the scooter.The Lucy wants to invite him to release from school to take her motorcycle ,but John is veryfrightened , he can't talk.

    Contrary of he just shakes head to indicate don't改成 Lucy offers him a ride home but John is so scared that he can’t even take. He simply shakes his head no.

    Source(s): 大學用書
  • Anonymous
    6 years ago

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  • 9 years ago

    You better post your article in Chinese so people can give better advice.

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